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(its an original, just wrote it)
The sickly fingers
Of nighttimes crawling hand
Tread slowly across my widowed spine
And with measured countenance
Doth each digit tap
Upon my sentient skin
And time like a crooked ship
Keeps veering off its destined course
Ragged winds dogging the hearts of lost sailors
Damned be they
Who chose their own storm
And the moon shines evermore
The clock moves slow yet fast
Consuming all with its constant tick
Its tock then resonating thickly
As if to tell us all that the ebb and flow
Shall recede but never die
And now the fingers have reached my head
Clawing at the shutters of my eyes
And with venom do they squeeze my skull
Silent screams of sleep foreboding
Haunt the halls of this weary mind
And the stars shine evermore
“I will not be a sailor forever”
Said I,
“Across this stormy sea”
But the dark of night
Whispered with might
“Forever mine, you’ll be!”
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Yea, Its hard for me to analyze my own writing but… i think it works that way :)
thanks!
:) thanks man!
snar if you love poetry what do you think of this
Life goes on:
for ever tear that falls,
life goes,
for every death that comes,
life goes,
but even know it all goes on,
a time in place as you cry alone,
a tear from your cheek says a thousand words,
love goes on as well and grows stronger for ever tear that you may have,
we all fall once and awile but love goes on as well,
I stand some times and my heart hurts from pain
but is stronger in the end for i have your love as well,
life goes and it comes and will always end with us.
I like it! Its very prothetic sounding and has a good rythm. Did you write it? Its very good. The only thing I’d say is that, you do repeat the word tear a lot, maybe thats for affect… I know theres no otehr word for it so its hard, believe me, been there XD.
:P i’ve written over 100 poems
we all have a time in place,
where our lifes will be great,
where we say our best,
and share the worst as well,
a place in time where we say i do,
and things are shared with tears as well,
we all have a time in life to share ours with another,
i to hope for the day that will come.
and during the years that go by,
watch and see as the life we make,
grows and learns just as we were,
with innocent eyes we guide them as well,
teaching right from wrong till the time comes,
when no longer needed and geting old,
laying our heads down for the final sleep.
we pass down our knowledge just like before,
our love and our bond grow even after we are gone.
:)! Cool! A fellow poet, I like your style man! You should do some posts of your own stuff!
well if you want to read more i can put up another post :P im working on publishing my book these are 2 of many that will be in it.. the books title will be “Lifes routes”
:D cool, im workin on sum novel ideas, I hope to publish them when i finish. Its hard to get your poems published unless ur well known but good luck to you mate.
I especially like the middle section, Im not sure precisely what it is but I really like something about it.
Thanks, haha, im exactly sure myself.
im not*
as a poet of one we all share the fun,
from our hearts the words flow and the passion builds,
we all share the sight of all that are equal and to show,
we hold a key that some can not,
we have the rhyme and all the bust,
nice!
once again snar u continue 2 amaze me lol
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