Love help: Should i give this poem to her? - Help.com

Wow …..thats a nice poem…it has alot of meaning to it…its nice…write me a poem:) jk..

but ur a good writer:)

good poem..

that got me in the heart what a buetiful poem

i like it. Good job!! =]

rocko wrote:
But should i give it to her?

If you like hurting people, sure.

wow, that was really good! really heartfelt, i like it a lot… you’re a good writer!
seems kinda like venting to me. really, really eloquent, beautiful venting, but still venting. i wouldn’t give it to her if i was you. i don’t think the beauty of the writing’s gonna dilute her…unhappiness with the fact that she caused you to write that. kinda like a guilt thing, you know? might get to her. just saying!

cool poem

Yes you should give it to her and make her re-think about what she has done by pushing you away.

Any ways i love the poem =]

xXEcinerXx

that was a fantastic poem and a great vent, but I don’t know that I would give it to her — the reason being it sounds in the end like you are telling her what negatives she should expect from her life out of her one experience with you. “One day you won’t want to be alone.. No one will be there for you.. Because you’ll have pushed everyone away” — Has she pushed “everyone away” or just you? the last couple of lines really won’t endear her to you if that is the intent and she might end up with more hard feelings — minus the caring ones. She won’t remember you in a positive way — but then maybe that is what you are hoping for. I say do what works for you though. Then theres that old French song my friend likes that is a nice way to call it off and leave them with a tear or some compassion.

Goodbye, no use leading with our chins

This is where our story ends

Never lovers, ever friends

Goodbye, let our hearts call it a day

But before you walk away

I sincerely want to say

I wish you bluebirds in the spring

To give your heart a song to sing

And then a kiss, but more than this

I wish you love

And in july a lemonade

To cool you in some leafy glade

I wish you health

But more than wealth

I wish you love

My breaking heart and I agree

That you and I could never be

So with my best

My very best

I set you free

I wish you shelter from the storm

A cozy fire to keep you warm

But most of all when snowflakes fall

I wish you love

cool Shawn i would change some lines for you though if you like but i thought you were happy to be free so why would you want to make her feel remorse or guilt for something your happy with,your creating a negative karma thing you know and this wont make you feel any better let it go and move foward,be bigger and prove her wrong in just being alive and true free and happy that will give her more to think about believe me

You were my first love i gave you my heart ,i promised you we would never part ,i promised you i would wait for you ,and swore that our love would always be true ,then you pushed me away threw away the love,said you just wanted to be left alone,im never going back that i can promise,one day you wont want to be alone and left in your solice,noone will be there for you because you pushed all away,and i wonder why is all that youll say….

Slight change for you friend but my answer to your post is no

nice poem but a bit bitter from your side,sorry just telling it how it is.

It is a lovely poem but I think it would be better for you not to give her this peom & concentrate on moving on .

You are so much in pain now , I can feel that but you need to move on , You will speed up the process of moving on if you stopped contacting with her . You are so nice & you will meet someone nice like you soon & be happy again , it is just a matter of time .

I don’t think you should give it to her, it will make it harder for her, and you both, to move on.

Writing poetry is a great way to vent though, so it’s good that you shared it with us. Hope it’s been a kinda therapy for you to write it.

Honestly, it’s a rather cliche poem that has little depth save for something personal. Good poetry is something that speaks to the reader, not the writer.

Also, get rid of those ellipses throughout (the ‘three dots’). They’re distracting and make for bad grammar. Why do people throw ellipses in where they aren’t needed? It’s not a catch-all punctuation mark that can replace a comma or a period when you don’t know otherwise. It’s a mark all its own, meant to replace full words, and should be reserved for essay writing.

And that’s my rant. Have a nice day.

GET A LIFE GRAMMA QUEEN

Anonymous wrote:
GET A LIFE GRAMMA QUEEN

Please. Without proper grammar, one has no idea what you’re trying to write. That, or it comes out like crap.

Lousy grammar is just a reflection of one’s failure out of the second grade where it was supposed to be taught to you. Oh well, wallow in your own idiocy for all I care.

yeh and sometimes even with perfect gramma its sounds like something crap anyway wallow in your punctuation padantic one cuz i dont care

hey rocko ,i can understand and read your poem just fine and think its great and im sure its a rough copy anyway ,i read your post you first say that your happy youve breken up,and then say your trying not to feel bad,i think you should just let it all wash and move along

****! I just wrote a whole dam response…….

Lmao to sum it up I don’t think you should give it to her……. Its fighting fire with fire and its over and done. What would you acomplish by sending it? More tears? Nah rocko you cared about this girl don’t waste more time. Move along……. Its the best advice I can give.

Anonymous wrote:
yeh and sometimes even with perfect gramma its sounds like something crap anyway wallow in your punctuation padantic one cuz i dont care

I’m sorry, I couldn’t understand your run-on sentence as being from someone whose primary language is English. Way to ruin the English language, bud.

By the way, do you believe in ‘English Only’ (assuming, of course, you’re American)? I have a strange feeling that you do.

And what’s wrong, exactly, with taking the time to have proper grammar? Do you like looking like an idiot? Or are you just too lazy to bother looking in the least bit intelligent?

Why are Americans so eager to forget simple things like form and structure? Imagine if newspapers were written this way. You wouldn’t know when one sentence started and when one ended, or if there were any breaks in between. It would be a jumbled mess! But then, I suppose you would appreciate a jumbled mess.

And I will wallow in my grammar, thank you very much. I look more professional as a writer this way, and not just another high-school graduate. (I blame No Child Left Behind and the American public school system. Poor, poor kids. They have no idea what they’re going on about.)

dont give it to her

dont give it to her unless shes nasty to you.

it was a good poem! but u shouldnt give it to her

anon americans invented lanquage budd so dont have a cow man, your not very intelligent for someone who claims to be smart ,keep your head stuck in the pages of anger management comics ,and liberate your personality cabbage disorder stop judging people critic,your rascist comments expose your own flaws and your way to uptight,i wish the newspapers were like that since its all propaganda and bull @#$& mindless information for yuppy socialites and brainwashed millapedes hellbent on contorting the truth and real agenda ,nerds with bifocals and coffee anxieties,eat my shorts

lol

It sounds like it should be a song :) good poem, but I wouldn’t give it to her. It’s kinda like guilt-tripping her. You’ll make her feel really bad and like if she goes back to you, it’ll because she doesn’t want you to be mad at her, not because she actually wants to.

hey i think u should give it 2 her if thats the way u feel!!

yes give it to her