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Isobell

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me.. with my collection.

I collect shallow poems.

The rules are as follows:

write a shallow poem. It has to be shallow. If you feel yourself straying and getting too deep, steer away child. There is no place for metaphor here. There is no place for hallucinatory expression. Just the shallow.

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Hi_Sai 4 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (2 minutes after post)

“I do not like green eggs and ham
I shall not eat them Sam-I-Am”

????
(Like that? XD Just as an example)

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Isobell 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (9 minutes after post)

Beautiful saiyuki0blabla.. a standing ovation.

Jebus.. that was way too deep. Please try again.

Isobell 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (12 minutes after post)

I’m feeling.. too much.

Isobell 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (12 minutes after post)

too much.. raw emotion.

lol

Hi_Sai 4 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (15 minutes after post)

Jebus Zeus wrote:
hmmm,,,
peice of dirt, eat me
or just beat me
i hate you
shoot me in the face
i lost my place

Oh wow…for something very short that is REALLY deep (seriously!!!)

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Isobell 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (15 minutes after post)

PERFECT

Isobell 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (16 minutes after post)

i agree sai. He can’t help but help himself

Isobell 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (26 minutes after post)

lol go report that inner orphan to my cryptic post then sunshine

Xeno Dragon 28 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (28 minutes after post)

So we need to write
some things with rhymes,
but have no meaning
between the lines?
Well that’s no fun,
the point of poems
is to express one’s self,
from within their bones.
But if you want
a string of text
with no more meaning
than that, I’m vexed.
You asked for shallow,
and now it’s obtained.
But this is too easy,
why not use one’s brain?
The deeper, the better
that’s my motto, you see,
when it comes to the ART
we call poetry.

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Isobell 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (31 minutes after post)

xeno, you are an artist. You must join the inner orphan in the cryptic section.

*bows respectively*

sometimes i just feel like the world is as deep as my ankles

Snar 41 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (1 hour, 19 minutes after post)

Waves,
Dripping drearily
Fighting fancifuly
Spent,
Receding rapidly
A generous goodbye

And the tide goes on and on

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Snar 41 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (1 hour, 22 minutes after post)

it shuld be “giving a generous goodbye” *slaps forehead*

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Michael Leibman 3 #
Littleton, CO, US | 1 year, 9 months ago (1 hour, 39 minutes after post)

one post, two post
red post, blue post

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Xeno Dragon 28 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (2 hours, 47 minutes after post)

Eh?

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Xeno Dragon 28 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (2 hours, 48 minutes after post)

Whatever floats your boat.

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Sans 57 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (5 hours, 9 minutes after post)

so i’m like, at the mall
standing in the hall
with a she-male
wondering if these shoes will fit
oh sh**
i broke a nail!

Twizzlenic 38 #
Southampton, M4, GB | 1 year, 9 months ago (5 hours, 38 minutes after post)

I like chicken.
With feathers or finger licken’
I don’t like beef,
Plays havoc with me teef’
I do like chops
Supermarket or shops
Buy it and freeze it
Anyway I please it,
I like chicken a lot!

Is this what you mean? Was quite hard… LOL!

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Tictactomm 2 #
Edmonton, AB, CA | 1 year, 9 months ago (18 hours, 18 minutes after post)

Rubble on my shoe,
Is actually poo,
from and ewe.
Ewwwww…..

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Tictactomm 2 #
Edmonton, AB, CA | 1 year, 9 months ago (18 hours, 20 minutes after post)

“Plays havoc with me teef”. Frick that’s funny!! Nice Twizz….

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Isobell 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 9 months ago (21 hours, 1 minute after post)

Oh wow! I didn’t expect to come back to all these marvellous poems hehe that’s so awesome.

Snar your poem was very beautiful, I love the imagery!
Michael, you really rose to the challenge haha short and snappy.
Thanicotinema.. you are a riddle wrapped in an enigma.. I loved it but that so should be in my cryptic poetry section I do feel.
Sansceriph.. that’s perfectly shallow in the most shallow way. Brilliant.
Twizzlenic.. yours is by far my favorite lmao, I love it. It sounds like something Noel Feilding would say.. so hilarious!!
Tictactomm.. that was.. lovely. Thank you.

“oh cheese is a kind of meat, a tasty yellow beef.. I milk it from my teet”

Twizzlenic 38 #
Southampton, M4, GB | 1 year, 9 months ago (1 day, 1 hour after post)

Thank you kindly me dear… Was fun!

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