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Another story by Xeno Dragon.

The Mind Trip, pt1

I wandered through my mind recently, and found it very difficult to concentrate. Mainly because there was very annoying music being played by my roommate. However, I journeyed on despite this distraction, and found myself on a dark, rocky beach, with only the light of an ever-present eyeball of a moon that insisted on watching my every move. Even when I walked beneath the stony crags that jutted awkwardly out of the rough sands of the beach, I felt the unease of the distant satellite that seemed closer to me than the silent water lapping at my feet. Even though I knew it was pinned in the black, starless expanse of sky, I felt it might drop at any moment and splash into the non-reflective water with the intent of watching me more closely.

I don’t know where I was headed, but I knew that I didn’t want to be where I was, despite it’s peaceful appearance. I turned to face the glassy ocean and looked down at my feet, where the black water rushed up and back in time with the pulsing of the moon, clinging to my ankles, and tugging at my flesh. I gave into the water’s incessant pull, and let it rise up around me. It flooded the already detestable landscape, and further tainted everything it touched. I watched it ripple over the ground beneath my feet and wash away the sand and gravel to reveal another ground beneath that, a ground which seemed to be a tarnished, broken mirror that stretched horizontally in every direction. I watched the water continue to spread it’s decay to the rock and stone, eroding them into blackened trees of warped and twisted wood that looked as though their trunks and reaching branches had been dripped into place by floating rivers of rotting mud. The vile tar water then rained upwards into the sky and formed thick, pulsing clouds of a deep blood red. These sky borne pendulums formed together to block out any view of the sky, and hung low over the demented forest I now found myself in.

I continued my walk, this time through the numerous semblances of decaying trunks that had somehow formed from the few rocky pillars on the beach. The red clouds above reflected up at me, distorted, from below, as I cut my feet on the broken mirror. It crushed and shattered in the shape of my feet whenever I took a step, only to heal and re-form itself a few moments later, to the reverse of the sound of it breaking in the first place. Having navigated my mind many times previous, this didn’t concern me. I knew better than to expect the laws of the real world to be upheld in my imagination.

What would normally concern me in this world is the vast number of demented and malformed creatures I know to inhabit it. I know not only due to past encounters, but also due to the simple fact that I, myself, created them. I do suspect that, given the virulent state of the thoughts I had echoing through my head, they knew better than to cause their usual trouble. So they clicked and growled as I passed, but nothing more.

I now found myself facing an obsidian wall which appeared to have forcibly ripped it’s way through the glass of the earth rather than having tirelessly grown from it, like the trees. In this volcanic stone behemoth, there was but a single crack, about the size for me to walk through. Seeing as there was no other apparent way to continue my aimless journey, and despite the blade-like edges of the roughly walled crevice, I decided that I would explore where, if anywhere, it would lead me.

As I entered the opening, I noticed the smell of brimstone and sulfur that commonly accompanies the beautifully deadly stone. Of course, I had no time to worry about that, as it was effort enough to avoid any but the most necessary contact with the razor edges that jutted out of the walls in ever-growing amounts. The hazardous tunnel opened up into a foul-smelling, damp cavern, the floor of which was not visible, as I was standing on a natural pathway of shiny, slippery, and lethal obsidian. This pathway stretched out like a narrow bridge over an expanse of infinite nothingness. So I crossed it. Not without weighing my limited options, of course, but what else was I to do? I certainly wasn’t turning around, and this was the only way forward. I took my time, but did not dawdle on the brittle path, and was soon at the far end of the cavern.

After making my way out through broken, slimy stalagmites, I found myself looking out from a great, gaping hole in the sky. A small trickle of liquid dripped out of the mouth of the cave and fell down to the velvety black sand desert far below. I watched as the trickle grew, as more of the liquid seeped out of the cavern behind me, until a small, yet powerful river poured with unending, growing intensity from the jagged tear in the sky that was the cave mouth, and into a quickly forming sea in the desert miles below. The river grew into a torrent which swept me out through the hole, and sent me falling through the air, passed floating, mirrored platforms which shattered into thousands of long needles and fell with me as I passed. The shards of broken glass embedded themselves like harpoons into the sand, and quickly grew in size to become crooked, spiky towers of mirrored glass and metal circuits. I, myself, plunged deep into the growing sea, and felt myself hammered downwards by the unending flow of liquid.

Once I found my way to the surface, the landscape had changed once more. The desert of black sand that I had viewed from far above was gone, replaced with an endless ocean, thick with the uneven towers jutting up from the water at odd angles. I swam to one of these towers and climbed it, eventually sitting near the pointed peak, and watching the suns rise.

I do so enjoy my imagination.

See you in a while for part 2. I would have kept going, but this post is long enough as it is.
Yours, as always,
A very thought-ridden Xeno Dragon

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CrackHacky offline Verified User (1 year, 2 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
Mill Hall, PA, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (7 minutes after post)

be sure to invite me to part two!

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PersonalPandaParty offline Verified User (1 year, 3 months) Long Term User Shouts: 337 #
Titusville, FL, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (8 minutes after post)

**** awesomeness.
The word choice and figurative language is just perfect, and gives a lot of insight into the mind and psyche of the author (you).

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (10 minutes after post)

If you have “xeno” on your tags, it will be automatic when I sign it like I do. Now that I have 150 friends, and will likely have more on the future, I simply don’t have time to waste clicking invites.

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CrackHacky changed the tags on this post: they were "Water, red, River, Mind, Glass, Desert, Mirror, broken, Cave, beach" 6 months, 3 weeks ago.

stellaga offline Verified User (6 months, 4 weeks) Long Term User Shouts: 0 #
Bentham, H2, GB | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (21 minutes after post)

what a ace story xeno

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (21 minutes after post)

Thank you.

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nikko offline Verified User (1 year) Long Term User Shouts: 17 #
US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (24 minutes after post)

Xeno, I did this for real. Did you?

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (26 minutes after post)

It depends on your meaning.

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nikko offline Verified User (1 year) Long Term User Shouts: 17 #
US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (36 minutes after post)

Did you really plunge your body into the dark abyss? I did. One of my dearest freinds, it felt awful. A dolphin I fed like a dog pushed me around that night. I was afraid of it. I found out later about a shark attack the next morning. I should drop my personal crap. It scared the hell out of me in that darkness, but I guess it knew somthing I did not.

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (43 minutes after post)

When I travel through my mind, I’m very aware that I am me, here in the real world. I do it before, during, and after writing something. I don’t think I’m doing what you’re doing, as I’m using the metaphor of my imaginary self traveling through my imagination, as I imagine it. Really, I’m just writing a story using the things and places that I picture making up the ‘landscape’ of my thoughts.

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nikko offline Verified User (1 year) Long Term User Shouts: 17 #
US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (1 hour, 21 minutes after post)

makes sense. What I watch here, does NOT.

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Vaughn, NM, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (1 hour, 39 minutes after post)

Yep, well written. Journeying is what you did, go to a shaman sometime and do and aided journey, you’d love it!

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (1 hour, 42 minutes after post)

I prefer to just take LSD if I want to go on a real journey.

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Vaughn, NM, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (1 hour, 45 minutes after post)

lol, well that can work too, but it’s not necessary. My shaman tried to get me to take a concoction of shrooms once and go to a fire ritual with them. Needless to say I haven’t been back to her hehe

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (1 hour, 50 minutes after post)

You should have given them to me.

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sansceriph offline Verified User (7 months, 1 week) Long Term User Shouts: 585 #
An Unknown Location | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (2 hours, 2 minutes after post)

poetic and well written.

good word–obsidian–had to look it up.

since we like it you might find a print audience as well. have you approached publishers?

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (2 hours, 4 minutes after post)

Lol, I wasn’t aware it was hard to look up. I just knew it.

Publishers? For this stuff?

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sansceriph offline Verified User (7 months, 1 week) Long Term User Shouts: 585 #
An Unknown Location | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (2 hours, 22 minutes after post)

not ‘hard’ to look up, ‘had’ to look up. one of those words that i was unsure of its meaning.

i don’t know much about the business of publishing poetry, but your writing is good. in my humble opinion you have a gift.

the more realistic (and marketable) approach would be for you to find the niche that suits your writing interests. your post reminds me of some of the better sf writing, or maybe a mind-trip or dream sequence from a stephen-king novel.

you could write reams of this and your readers would remember some of the more striking imagery. but if you developed your ideas into short stories, novellas or novels–with compelling characters and conflict–your would give readers more than fine imagery.

and then there’s always music videos and screenplays.

a good story has power. whether you went with sf, fantasy, erotic, horror or whatever, it’s a story people remember.

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (2 hours, 31 minutes after post)

Lol, see, it’s funny, because that’s what I intend to do as a career. I have several (like…nine or so) comic books, a novel, a children’s book, three screenplays, and a videogame script that I want to see published, and put on shelves.

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sansceriph offline Verified User (7 months, 1 week) Long Term User Shouts: 585 #
An Unknown Location | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (2 hours, 42 minutes after post)

excellent. but don’t do what i did. i worked on a novel for 9 years, then couldn’t find a publisher, so i self-published. i didn’t go to a vanity publisher–that would have been worse–i made my own little publishing co. on the side and printed and promoted it myself. made a lot of mistakes, including that i didn’t get bound galleys to reviewers. i still have BOXES of the **** thing in my house. publishers like authors who are already published. many actually have policies of not receiving unsolicited manuscripts from unpublished authors.

if you have short pieces that are ready, you can submit them to magazines or other pubs that match the content. getting short pieces published will help you establish a track record. then when you write your opus, your submission letters can include references to your published works. and you may make contacts along the way.

you may know this stuff already, so i’m making an assumption that you haven’t already pursued this.

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (2 hours, 47 minutes after post)

I haven’t yet. I don’t have enough written down. Most of it is in my head. I do have a few pages of a comic on here, though. It’s in one of my old posts called “Journey We More”, if you’re interested. It shows that the biggest thing holding me back from my comics is my lack of a skilled artist.

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sansceriph offline Verified User (7 months, 1 week) Long Term User Shouts: 585 #
An Unknown Location | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (4 hours, 27 minutes after post)

i took a look, lol, funny strip. i like the nightmare frame too, but as you admitted, your strength is writing. if your furry illustrator didn’t work out, there are sources like http://www.freelancers1.com/ where you might find a collaborator. did you get the furry strip going?

also, you may have read it, but if not check out ‘the amazing adventures of kavalier and clay’ about two jewish kids who were pioneers in the comic book era around the time of wwii.

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (6 hours, 42 minutes after post)

No, unfortunately, I never did get it going.

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sansceriph offline Verified User (7 months, 1 week) Long Term User Shouts: 585 #
An Unknown Location | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (7 hours after post)

yeah, sometimes an idea looks good at first, but not that many have staying power.
i’ve long been a fan of stephen king, not only for his imagination but for how prolific he is. his book on writing, aptly titled ‘on writing’ is a good motivator.

i’ll be looking for the next installment of the mind trip, then.

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Xeno Dragon offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 192 #
Phoenix, AZ, US | 6 months, 3 weeks ago (10 hours, 30 minutes after post)

I’ll make all of my stories eventually, no need to worry about that.

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Xeno Dragon edited this post 6 months, 2 weeks ago. Read the previous text »

Another story by Xeno Dragon.

The Mind Trip, pt1

I wandered through my mind recently, and found it very difficult to concentrate. Mainly because there was very annoying music being played by my roommate. However, I journeyed on despite this distraction, and found myself on a dark, rocky beach, with only the light of an ever-present eyeball of a moon that insisted on watching my every move. Even when I walked beneath the stony crags that jutted awkwardly out of the rough sands of the beach, I felt the unease of the distant satellite that seemed closer to me than the silent water lapping at my feet. Even though I knew it was pinned in the black, starless expanse of sky, I felt it might drop at any moment and splash into the non-reflective water with the intent of watching me more closely.

I don’t know where I was headed, but I knew that I didn’t want to be where I was, despite it’s peaceful appearance. I turned to face the glassy ocean and looked down at my feet, where the black water rushed up and back in time with the pulsing of the moon, clinging to my ankles, and tugging at my flesh. I gave into the water’s incessant pull, and let it rise up around me. It flooded the already detestable landscape, and further tainted everything it touched. I watched it ripple over the ground beneath my feet and wash away the sand and gravel to reveal another ground beneath that, a ground which seemed to be a tarnished, broken mirror that stretched horizontally in every direction. I watched the water continue to spread it’s decay to the rock and stone, eroding them into blackened trees of warped and twisted wood that looked as though their trunks and reaching branches had been dripped into place by floating rivers of rotting mud. The vile tar water then rained upwards into the sky and formed thick, pulsing clouds of a deep blood red. These sky borne pendulums formed together to block out any view of the sky, and hung low over the demented forest I now found myself in.

I continued my walk, this time through the numerous semblances of decaying trunks that had somehow formed from the few rocky pillars on the beach. The red clouds above reflected up at me, distorted, from below, as I cut my feet on the broken mirror. It crushed and shattered in the shape of my feet whenever I took a step, only to heal and re-form itself a few moments later, to the reverse of the sound of it breaking in the first place. Having navigated my mind many times previous, this didn’t concern me. I knew better than to expect the laws of the real world to be upheld in my imagination.

What would normally concern me in this world is the vast number of demented and malformed creatures I know to inhabit it. I know not only due to past encounters, but also due to the simple fact that I, myself, created them. I do suspect that, given the virulent state of the thoughts I had echoing through my head, they knew better than to cause their usual trouble. So they clicked and growled as I passed, but nothing more.

I now found myself facing an obsidian wall which appeared to have forcibly ripped it’s way through the glass of the earth rather than having tirelessly grown from it, like the trees. In this volcanic stone behemoth, there was but a single crack, about the size for me to walk through. Seeing as there was no other apparent way to continue my aimless journey, and despite the blade-like edges of the roughly walled crevice, I decided that I would explore where, if anywhere, it would lead me.

As I entered the opening, I noticed the smell of brimstone and sulfur that commonly accompanies the beautifully deadly stone. Of course, I had no time to worry about that, as it was effort enough to avoid any but the most necessary contact with the razor edges that jutted out of the walls in ever-growing amounts. The hazardous tunnel opened up into a foul-smelling, damp cavern, the floor of which was not visible, as I was standing on a natural pathway of shiny, slippery, and lethal obsidian. This pathway stretched out like a narrow bridge over an expanse of infinite nothingness. So I crossed it. Not without weighing my limited options, of course, but what else was I to do? I certainly wasn’t turning around, and this was the only way forward. I took my time, but did not dawdle on the brittle path, and was soon at the far end of the cavern.

After making my way out through broken, slimy stalagmites, I found myself looking out from a great, gaping hole in the sky. A small trickle of liquid dripped out of the mouth of the cave and fell down to the velvety black sand desert far below. I watched as the trickle grew, as more of the liquid seeped out of the cavern behind me, until a small, yet powerful river poured with unending, growing intensity from the jagged tear in the sky that was the cave mouth, and into a quickly forming sea in the desert miles below. The river grew into a torrent which swept me out through the hole, and sent me falling through the air, passed floating, mirrored platforms which shattered into thousands of long needles and fell with me as I passed. The shards of broken glass embedded themselves like harpoons into the sand, and quickly grew in size to become crooked, spiky towers of mirrored glass and metal circuits. I, myself, plunged deep into the growing sea, and felt myself hammered downwards by the unending flow of liquid.

Once I found my way to the surface, the landscape had changed once more. The desert of black sand that I had viewed from far above was gone, replaced with an endless ocean, thick with the uneven towers jutting up from the water at odd angles. I swam to one of these towers and climbed it, eventually sitting near the pointed peak, and watching the suns rise.

I do so enjoy my imagination.

See you in a while for part 2. I would have kept going, but this post is long enough as it is.
Yours, as always,
A very thought-ridden Xeno Dragon

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