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Drake The Vampire Lord
There are some things in this world that are horribly twisted. Some things too dark to see, even in the brightest of lights. Such things are rock slugs, divine evil, and hypocrisy. But to enter the realm beyond is to exceed all logical limitations. It simply cannot be. But indeed in some cases it is. In some horribly morphed worlds, such evil exist. Such is are world. Such evil does indeed exist. Such evil is that of Drake, the vampire lord. Drake was a tall, weakly built man whose only sanctuary is a pit of venomous snakes.
Drake walled himself out from the rest of the world in his castle, on the moon. “Hi!” drake shouted, while he waved to his friend, Frosty the snowman. Frosty was about to say ‘Hi!’, but failed to when a razor sharp spear pierced his soft icey vulnerable flesh. He stuttered and coughed up abit of blood before passing out. Drake looked down at earth and saw the man the threw the spear at frosty. In raged, he summoned 999,999,999,999,999 vampires to wreck havoc on the humans. He also summoned 4 vampire generals to control the other vampires and make the attack more efferent. Each vampire general controlled 249,999,999,999,999.75 vampires. (Note that 999,999,999,999,999 divided by 4 is 249,999,999,999,999.75 so each general controlled an equal amount). The vampires killed all humans. The first vampire general was named summer, the second was named winter, the third was named spring, the last was named fall. In honor of the 4 vampire generals, drake made a season for each of them. That’s why we have four seasons, winter, spring, summer, and fall.
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