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is this a good being page for a book i wrote it all by myself…

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It was a cold dark night. The moon was filled blood and rage. It was the night every thing went wrong.

The government was trying to build a new type of soldier. So that they could destroy any enemy that got in there way. But the experiment went wrong the soldiers wanted more than killing they wanted to make every one and every thing like them. They learned that by biting some one or some thing on the neck would do just that. So the government try to get rid of them before the new species got out but they were to late. The world called them vampires… you know like the ones in books and your deepest fears.
When the government found out that they could not kill the vampires they thought someone could. They used a 13 year old girl Named Echo. It was Echo’s destiny to save humanity… what was left of it. But Echo is not the only 13 out there who was used to kill. The first vampire was a 13 year old boy named Trevor. Which means all the other vampires were being controlled by a teenager. And that teenager wanted one person and that person only Me Echo.

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SingerInPurple 128 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (7 minutes after post)

OMG! VAMPIRES! I LOVE VAMPIRES! I think it sounds great…except the second line I think you mean to say “the moon was filled [with] blood and rage”….good luck with your book!

funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (7 minutes after post)

yah thats what i meant i was kinda sleepy when i wrote it..and thanks i like vampires to

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SingerInPurple 128 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (8 minutes after post)

have you read Twilight? it’s amazing

JesusMurphy 24 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (9 minutes after post)

Its okay, but kinda been done before.

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funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (9 minutes after post)

no but i sooooo want to a bunch of my friends say its a good book

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Hohenheim of Light 347 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (10 minutes after post)

funnaygirl12 wrote:
no but i sooooo want to a bunch of my friends say its a good book

That’s not how literary criticism works….

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funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (10 minutes after post)

GuerillaRadio wrote:
Its okay, but kinda been done before.

well you know what they say nothing is better than the classics

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funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (10 minutes after post)

Commander Ikari wrote:

funnaygirl12 wrote:
no but i sooooo want to a bunch of my friends say its a good book
That’s not how literary criticism works….

????

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SingerInPurple 128 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (11 minutes after post)

it’s AMAZING! especially if you like vampires…the last one in the series is coming out August 1, go to the book parties at borders or barns and nobles…people are going to dress up like vampires

JesusMurphy 24 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (11 minutes after post)

funnaygirl12 wrote:

Commander Ikari wrote:

funnaygirl12 wrote:
no but i sooooo want to a bunch of my friends say its a good book
That’s not how literary criticism works….
????

lol, he means if everybody just says how good it is, you’d never improve or grow.

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funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (12 minutes after post)

cool have you ever read cirque du freak

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An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (12 minutes after post)

GuerillaRadio wrote:

funnaygirl12 wrote:

Commander Ikari wrote:

funnaygirl12 wrote:
no but i sooooo want to a bunch of my friends say its a good book
That’s not how literary criticism works….
????
lol, he means if everybody just says how good it is, you’d never improve or grow.

ohhhhh i know that lol

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SingerInPurple 128 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (13 minutes after post)

no, but i want to read it!

funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (14 minutes after post)

omg you should so kid at my school told me that i should now im like addicted lol

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funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (16 minutes after post)

thats kinda where i got the idea for the book im writing

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SingerInPurple 128 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (17 minutes after post)

very nice…I’ll be sure to order that book, is it by Darren Shan?

funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (18 minutes after post)

yah and i think there making a movie some time

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SingerInPurple 128 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (18 minutes after post)

ha, that’s funny, they’re making a movie for Twilight too

funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (19 minutes after post)

lol cool but i will be sure to read the book first

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SingerInPurple 128 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (22 minutes after post)

good! I’ll do the same for Cirque du Freak

funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (23 minutes after post)

kk what other vampire books are good????hmmmmmm

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SingerInPurple 128 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (24 minutes after post)

There’s “Vampire kisses” and “Diary of a Vampire”…I haven’t read them, but I’ve heard they’re good

funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (25 minutes after post)

hmmm i will have to find them and read them…you know what is funny is that i dont userly like talking about books oh well i do now i guess lol

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SingerInPurple 128 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (26 minutes after post)

haha I don’t think anyone really does, but vampires are so amazing, how can you resist them :D

funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (28 minutes after post)

idk know how any one could resist them and i know a couple of people who talk only about books with one of my friends lol but they are both really weird but thats ok i still think the are awesome :p

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JakeyO 10 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (29 minutes after post)

Any idea can be progressed to make it special and interesting, this could be a good start.
However, work on your grammar and sentence structure.

funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (33 minutes after post)

yah i know i will but i dont plan on being some famous writer just get bored really easy lol but if i do become a famous writer that would be cool :)but im only 13 so i rather not think about my future anyways but thanks for the advice

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-ROSE- 137 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (36 minutes after post)

this post was fun lol

unexpected twists in the middle. i liked it.

it’s a little short though. and a fiew more adjectives couldn’t hurt :D

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potatobreadrules 24 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (2 hours, 4 minutes after post)

it’s great - just slightly iffy punctuation. and you wrote “there” rather than “their.”

funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (15 hours, 17 minutes after post)

franchesca wrote:
this post was fun lol

unexpected twists in the middle. i liked it.

it’s a little short though. and a fiew more adjectives couldn’t hurt :D

thanks glad you liked it yah i know i need to fix some mistakes

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funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (15 hours, 18 minutes after post)

potatobreadrules wrote:
it’s great - just slightly iffy punctuation. and you wrote “there” rather than “their.”

yah i know i do that all the time :)

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Anonymous #
1 month, 2 weeks ago (18 hours, 34 minutes after post)

wow its great!

funnaygirl12 7 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 2 weeks ago (18 hours, 44 minutes after post)

thank you

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