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A poem for your veiwing pleasure

(untitled at the mo)
Supersonic engines and rockets in command
Commend your soul to whoever wants to have it
Nothing has ever been not in demand
Now how we signal to whoever wants to see this sh*t.
Decaying orbit sputnik satellite collision
Moonlight reflecting nothing too right
Concrete dogs in concrete towns
Nothingness people bringing something up
Bile rising in a thousand muted throats
Cheap plastic people with costly real surgery
Pile the corpses high on the underground
Under the mat – under the water drowned and soaked
Soaked and dead to the nerves of cable
Cable blares out static noise white light
Refocus the camera on the dying
Never too near – robotic remote removed.
Anaesthetic anthems – paralytic cinema through a lens
Cameras on walls – in reality and reality tv
Write the future you want and play the part true.

What do ya reckon?

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jonathand offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 0 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 4 months ago (3 minutes after post)

don’t know why but i recall that song from R.E.M - its the end of the world as we know it.

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tmpy~is~back offline Verified User (1 year, 5 months) Long Term User Shouts: 5 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 4 months ago (3 minutes after post)

Hmmm… I always wanted to write stuff like this, but never seem to get it right! Maybe you could be my counterpart?! It is a good one though, hope everyone can follow it! :D

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littlenick offline Verified User (1 year, 7 months) Long Term User Shouts: 143 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 4 months ago (12 minutes after post)

Too technical?

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An Unknown Location | 1 year, 4 months ago (43 minutes after post)

I must admit, I am a little…lost.

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Brie offline Verified User (1 year, 4 months) Long Term User Shouts: 27 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 3 months ago (2 weeks, 3 days after post)

I have no clue just what your saying…sorry
but good job

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1 year, 2 months ago (1 month, 3 weeks after post)

“Nothingness people bringing something up
Bile rising in a thousand muted throats”

That’s ******* amazing the entire thing but I love the above.

may I suggest for a name supersonic eyes. you should enter this piece into a poetry contest.

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An Unknown Location | 11 months, 1 week ago (5 months after post)

i like anony’s suggested title.
and it’s the kind of poem that makes me “i think i do identify with it, i hope, hopefully, it’s not brave enough to make it clear to me that i identify with it though, it could be a guy just arranging words to impress chicks, but it isn’t rl here, so that option is kinda out, but i still can’t tell for sure it reflects the part of me i’m looking for in it, this text has truly focked my brains for a couple minutes now, i focking hate it, fock this… focking cont.”
hows everything?
luvluv

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An Unknown Location | 11 months, 1 week ago (5 months after post)

on second thought i think i do identify with it… wait, do i

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