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Song I wrote

Just wanted to share a song I wrote.

Verse one
The day when we first met.
My bike got totally destroyed.
It didn’t matter cause you were cute.
And I wanted to join you, in your journey.

We had some fun in the forest
Fun in the cafe, fun in the tent.
Then we went searching, for more.

Chorus
Our ribbon of love, tangles us together.
So when we’re apart, we’re still in our hearts.
We split in two, one for me, one for you.
A symbol of our relationship.

Verse 2
I really missed my Mother.
Got pissed off by my Brother.
Who came along, as well as your friend.
I wished it would never end.

We met good friends and bad enemies
Spicing up our journey.
Then we went searching, for more.

Chorus
Our ribbon of love, tangles us together.
So when we’re apart, we’re still in our hearts.
We split in two, one for me, one for you.
A symbol of our relationship.

Bridge

I missed you,
I hope you missed me too.
I want to kiss you,
I hope you wanna kiss me too.
I love you,
I hope you love me too.

Verse 3
Remember that time we swam in the ocean
All the pretty fish followed us.
It was so cool, don’t ya think?
I hope you agree

We had some fun in the forest
Fun in the cafe, fun in the tent.
Then we went searching, for more.

Chorus (x2)
Our ribbon of love, tangles us together.
So when we’re apart, we’re still in our hearts.
We split in two, one for me, one for you.
A symbol of our relationship.

It’s our ribbon of love!
Precious to me, a nice souvenir for you.
The ribbon tangles our love together.
Roses die and get disposed off.
But ribbons with proper care can last forever.
That’s why I hope you take care of it
and make our ribbon of love, last forever.

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glasspanda offline Verified User (1 year, 3 months) Long Term User Shouts: 14 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 3 months ago (7 minutes after post)

Oh, I really like it!
So creative. :)

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An Unknown Location | 5 months, 3 weeks ago (10 months after post)

this is a bad song :]

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Hazella offline Verified User (1 year, 5 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 5 months, 3 weeks ago (10 months after post)

kkjjhyhu wrote:
this is a bad song :]

why?

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Ravenwood0001 offline Verified User (4 months, 3 weeks) Long Term User Shouts: 0 #
An Unknown Location | 4 months, 3 weeks ago (11 months after post)

I think I would like to know what sort of an instrumental/vocals it would go with. It’s all well and good to have a nice lyric, but without the music behind it it can be hard to give an actual judgment of a “song.”

That having been said, I think that the poem definitely has promise. I’m a bit picky on my poetry, so please accept the fact that I say it has promise as a nod of encouragement, not a rebuke.

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