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PLZ .

if you have anything to add or change to this please tell me.. give honest thoughts and opinions..
thanks

I’m just wishing like crazy
that i’m not fishing like crazy
hopin this love will work
cause babe, your the world to me
and your what i need
I know you’ll leave
and leave me down inside
but lonely nights
i will not cry
my love for you will always last
you’ll be my favourite bit of past

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blue835 1 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (0 minutes after post)

if ur gonna give that to a girl, id think twice mate

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An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (4 minutes after post)

blue835 wrote:
if ur gonna give that to a girl, id think twice mate

lol, same here actually. I don’t know what fishing like crazy has to do…unless you mean plenty more fish in the sea lol, like the saying. But yeah, needs a little work. Hah, it’s hard to make good poetry, but just stick with it.

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Anonymous #
1 year, 2 months ago (19 minutes after post)

the rhyming is all over the place and lack of rhyming and you repeat words and i have no idea what fishing like crazy means and if it means trying to find fish in the sea it DOES NOT work in this poem becuase you are talking about being with this person!!!….try this

I’m just wishing like crazy hoping,
that this love will come back.
you are my world and
everything I need.
I know you’ll leave,
crushing my insides.
These lonely nights,
I refuse to cry
my love is forever
my favorite bit of the past.

whaples201 1 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (52 minutes after post)

Needs rhyming, needs more meaning and needs some order, make it about happy things or atleast good sounding things, like the times you had together if she’s thinking about leaving you

OOOOOOOOOOOOOOR

If you want a poem to steal and give to a girl, check one of mine, they’re a hellva lot better, and i dont care if others use em
Links below
http://help.com/post/195039-she-went-…
http://help.com/post/194262-she-was-t…
http://help.com/post/193971-she-got-m…
comments,advice,revisions,whatnot accepted on all of em, check them and steal em to give to someone if u so desire

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njpita2 1 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (16 hours, 36 minutes after post)

your poem doesnt have to rhyme….rhyming doesnt make it a poem and

WHAPLES201….your poems are the same poem 3 different ways and wayyyyyy to much repetition in the last one. every single word in a poem means something so when you repeat a line so many times its wayyyy too much for a poem to handle. its like taking a word and repeating it so many times that it looses meaning which is what your poems did…. lost meaning.

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whaples201 1 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (19 hours, 38 minutes after post)

First of all one of those with the “refrain” so to speak, is a song i wrote for her, and yes they’re all the same thing about the same person, and dont criticize someone when they’re trying what tf have u done? until you can come up with better, shutty