life help: The Treetop Wonder

Sir Evan

The Treetop Wonder

I posted this once before, but I didn’t get near as many responses as I was wanting, so I’m giving it one more shot. Just a poem I wrote, what do you think?
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The Treetop Wonder

A man of wisdom says the obituary, wise is shunning the world
Rings of gold on the fingers that steal from the poor and give to the rich.
Your death is the classiest ever, as your rings forever glisten in the rain.
Weapon of choice? You.
The man of ‘wisdom’, who makes himself feel better by the failure of others,
locked up inside, creating an army of himself. every soldier being his worst enemy.

Those treetops up so tall, treetops of life. Or Death?
From those treetops you will fall.
Your soul gone as a gun falls with you, lands beside you.
Courage, meet coward. Courage greets coward as coward picks the gun up.
Courage disappears as coward falls into a lifeless body. The body of wisdom.

There, those treetops up so tall. From those treetops you will fall.
Fall and fall and fall.
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Thank you very much for taking your time to read it.

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angel♥ 11 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (4 minutes after post)

wow.. that was amazing!
you really have a way with words!
keep writing =)

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An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (14 minutes after post)

The content is the one who has nothing to prove, he goes about his day without a care, not bothered if someone will stop and stare. He thinks of the past and what’s yet to be done, he never concerns himself with being shunned. When his energy is used up for the day, and is completely spent, he knows that he is the man that is completely content.

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littlenick 159 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (33 minutes after post)

Awesome poem! It makes you feel like you’re there!

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An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (36 minutes after post)

Very nice, 5/5 :)

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An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (37 minutes after post)

Well done, quite visual :)

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An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (39 minutes after post)

Anyone like my addendum?

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An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (40 minutes after post)

dave1971199 wrote:
Anyone like my addendum?

dave1971199 wrote:
The content is the one who has nothing to prove, he goes about his day without a care, not bothered if someone will stop and stare. He thinks of the past and what’s yet to be done, he never concerns himself with being shunned. When his energy is used up for the day, and is completely spent, he knows that he is the man that is completely content.

I wish I could write like that! Awesome poem and awesome addendum!

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gerry51 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (40 minutes after post)

Very good poem I really enjoyed it. Thanks Littlenick.

dave1971199 1 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (43 minutes after post)

I have been writing poems for over twelve years. Your poem is great and you have so much potential.

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miss_enigma 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (43 minutes after post)

dave1971199 wrote:
Anyone like my addendum?

Yes I enjoyed that as well.

Lots of poets on here, I’m one myself :)

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An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (50 minutes after post)

I have read you work and you too are good at your art.

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An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (53 minutes after post)

dave1971199 wrote:
I have read you work and you too are good at your art.

Well thanks a bunch Dave!

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An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (2 hours, 17 minutes after post)

It was good.

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An Unknown Location | 1 year, 2 months ago (2 hours, 36 minutes after post)

I am not poet
And these words stirs confusion within
Brain depleted like a tire pierced with a nail
Words gone haywire like a virused computer

Brows almost touches each other
Strain from trying to understand is bruising my brain
Your poem is good as per all the comments here
But this string of words seem strange to me

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