Can you read my story to be, possibly, and tell me what you think?
UNREALITY-
Lia picked at her fingernails, deep in thought. Her best friend, Alli, sighed. They were sitting on Alli’s green polka dotted bed. Alli finally spoke, “Lia, Lia, where art thou Lia? Ohmygosh Li, focus!”
Lia slowly looked up and stared at her friend for a moment, still unfocused, but then nodded. “It’s cool, I’m good,” she said.
“Li, you zone out, way too much. Seriously,” complained Alli, “What are you thinking about, I mean, could you tell me please?
Lia looked at her friend and contemplated what was hiding behind her dark brown eyes. Her friend was about her height, five feet, five inches, and was really intellegent, for a 14-year old, anyways. She had dark brown hair, a really sweet smile, and a heart shaped face. Lia sighed loudly and thought about her own reflection, the one she stared at in a mirror every morning. She was plain, long brown hair, brown eyes, glasses, and tan skin. She was also 14 years old, but about eight months younger than her friend. Nothing really that unique. The only unique thing about Lia was she didn’t know when she would die.
In the world called UnReality, everyone knew when they’d die. Right when there were born, a nurse would tell their parents when. Then, it would be recorded in the Book of Aging. Alli was going to die when she was 73. Lia never knew. She could die when she turns 100, or within a few seconds. Lia hated the fact she didn’t know when.
Lia had heard the story from her mother numerous times. As she recalled, it went like this. When you were born, the nurse, Patti, placed you in my arms. You were the most beautiful baby I had ever seen. The nurse then got out the records, and was about to write down you age, when suddenly she passed out upon the floor. I had been just about to ask her the number, but that was when she fell. She lay there, and I shrieked, so loudly, people came running. Then you started crying, loudly. The noise echoed throughout the room, and nobody could quiet you down. I wanted to cry out, to find out how long you would live for. You do know, that after 5 minutes have passed, you can’t tell anymore, right? Well, I screamed out to all the people, but they ignored me. I cried, tears flowed down my face, as did you. Your face was bright red and I realized, you must be cold. I held you closer and pulled up a blanket while the doctors rushed around, trying to revive the nurse. No matter how much I screamed and cried, they never answered me. My baby, I’m so sorry, but you’ll never know your death date till you die.
Lia shuddered a bit at the memory and looked up to see Alli staring at her warily. “Ohmygosh, Li! You seriously need to stop that!”
Lia smiled warily. “I’ve got something to tell you Alli,” Lia admitted. “I’m not sure when I’ll die. I don’t know how old I will be when I suddenly pass out dead. I don’t know if it’ll be now, or in fifty years. I don’t know Alli, I’m sorry I never told you before.”
“Li-ah! Your sense of humor right now is so not funny! Seriously, can you just tell me when. I’d prefer to know if you were about to keel over dead in the next five minutes. I mean, I’m dying at the age of 73, probably while I sleep. I told you, Li, can’t you just tell me!”
“Alli. You are my best friend in the whole entire world. I’d tell you if I knew, I swear.” Then Lia proceeded to tell Alli the true story, the exact one her mother had told her, over and over again.
Alli stared at Lia, and Lia stared back. Alli stared a bit longer and finally grimaced. “You aren’y joking, are you?”
Lia nodded, not knowing what to say. She had wanted to know ehn she would die all her life, but she never would. Life was so unfair. Then again, thats what her mother always said. Life is unfair, Lia. You have to live with it.
Finally Lia stood up. “Alli, I should really get home now, thanks so much for inviting me over. I’ll see you in school tomorrow, okay?”
Alli nodded, and frowned just the slightest bit as Lia walked out the door.
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Can you read my story to be, possibly, and tell me what you think?
UNREALITY-
Lia picked at her fingernails, deep in thought. Her best friend, Alli, sighed. They were sitting on Alli’s green polka dotted bed. Alli finally spoke, “Lia, Lia, where art thou Lia? Ohmygosh Li, focus!”
Lia slowly looked up and stared at her friend for a moment, still unfocused, but then nodded. “It’s cool, I’m good,” she said.
“Li, you zone out, way too much. Seriously,” complained Alli, “What are you thinking about anyways?
Lia looked at her friend and contemplated what was hiding behind her dark brown eyes. Her friend was about her height, five feet, five inches, and was really smart, for a 14-year old, anyways. She had dark brown hair, a really sweet smile, and a heart shaped face. Lia sighed loudly and thought about her own reflection, the one she stared at in a mirror every morning. She was plain, long brown hair, brown eyes, glasses, and tan skin. She was also 14 years old, but about eight months younger than her friend. Nothing really that unique. The only unique thing about Lia was she didn’t know when she would die.
In the world called, UnReality, everyone knew when they’d die. Right when there were born, a nurse would tell their parents when. Then, it would be recorded in the Book of Aging. Alli was going to die when she was 73. Lia never knew. She could die when she turns 100, or withing a few seconds. Lia hated the fact she didn’t know when.
Lia had heard the story from her mother numerous times. As she recalled, it went like this. When you were born, the nurse, Patti, placed you in my arms. You were the most beautiful baby I had ever seen. The nurse then got out the records, and was about to write down you age, when suddenly she passed out upon the floor. I had been just about to ask her the number, but that was when she fell. She lay there, and I shrieked, so loudly, people came running. Then you started crying, loudly. The noise echoed throughout the room, and nobody could quiet you down. I wanted to cry out, to find out how long you would live for. You do know, that after 5 minutes have passed, you can’t tell anymore, right? Well, I screamed out to all the people, but they ignored me. I cried, tears flowed down my face, as did you. Your face was bright red and I realized, you must be cold. I held you closer and pulled up a blanket while the doctors rushed around, trying to revive the nurse. No matter how much I screamed and cried, they never answered me. My baby, I’m so sorry, but you’ll never know your death date till you die.
Lia shuddered a bit at the memory and looked up to see Alli staring at her warily. “Ohmygosh, Li! You seriously need to stop that!”
Lia smiled warily. “I’ve got something to tell you Alli,” Lia admitted. “I’m not sure when I’ll die. I don’t know how old I will be when I suddenly pass out dead. I don’t know if it’ll be now, or in fifty years. I don’t know Alli, I’m sorry I never told you before.”
“Li-ah! Your sense of humor right now is so not funny! Seriously, can you just tell me when. I’d prefer to know if you were about to keel over dead in the next five minutes. I mean, I’m dying at the age of 73, probably while I sleep. I told you, Li, can’t you just tell me!”
“Alli. You are my best friend in the whole entire world. I’d tell you if I knew, I swear.” Then Lia proceeded to tell Alli the true story, the exact one her mother had told her, over and over again.
Alli stared at Lia, and Lia stared back. Alli stared a bit longer and finally grimaced. “You aren’y joking, are you?”
Lia nodded, not knowing what to say. She had wanted to know ehn she would die all her life, but she never would. Life was so unfair. Then again, thats what her mother always said. Life is unfair, Lia. You have to live with it.
Finally Lia stood up. “Alli, I should really get home now, thanks so much for inviting me over. I’ll see you in school tomorrow, okay?”
Alli nodded, and frowned just the slightest bit as Lia walked out the door.
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