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i wrote this poem and i was wondering if you could rate it?

its about a interesting topic…….

they were all flying
soaring above the clouds
looking down at the world
laughing
they thought that their problems were
beneath them and
problems can’t reach you when your
high
in the sky
come join us
they said to me
but I said no
because I know that as soon as all the smoke clears
reality will come
causing them to fall right out of the sky
and they will come
crashing to the ground
just like
stones
and they will land on the
grass
which isn’t as soft as they think
and then they will be wishing
they had stayed on the edge
but not jumped
because what goes up
must come down and
when you fall and dent your wings
you’ll be just as
burned
as the
joint
that got you flying
and not even the
magic dragon
can carry you in the sky forever
I guess flying
isn’t as quite good as its made out to be

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