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A poem I wrote…

.Let me know what you think of it plz:)

My heart is pouring empty. Pushing the needle in so sofly. my head aches out so deadly. this isn’t who i am. lying awake I am drownding. her heart beats on oh so mighty. fighting a feeling makes me shutter. her eyes blood shot it makes me wonder. let me touch you one more time. to feel the life i no longer have. lying still the room is spinning. no more lies until next morning. hardly alive she pulls the curtin. lights flash on her pulse is racin. hands reach out fingers touch. why can’t i learn from nothin. lying awake the clouds are partin. fully submerged the clock is crackin. losing control a world less mended. fighting a crime her time has ended

Sliding gently into consequence. I didn’t see it coming. Hoping flashing lights and instaments would be my desire. “Not a chance!” she screamed from the top of her umbrella. Words dripping to empty streets. ‘It’s all said and done’ When will you come to know it’s not apart of me. You are not the one to make me see. Fall back onto your empty promises. Submerge yourself in greed. I will not become an object. Just let me bleed.

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hope02 offline Verified User (1 year) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year ago (5 minutes after post)

i find it a bit chopy and disjointed, maybe given the subject matter that is what you wanted.

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