poetry help: inspired, i have decided to share some of my poetry. - Help.com

inspired, i have decided to share some of my poetry.

please give me your honest opinion!!

1.

I exist in a wasteland of broken promises;
The blade is love, tear and blood
Are one.

Frolic-in-the-woods daydreams left dangling,

Advancing
And receding;
Oh that they would still, one way
Or another.

Hope.
The illusion of sunlight
Tantalises, and leads me to strive;
There is no one to catch me
And I fall bleeding to my knees.

Again and again

The cycle can be broken.

2.

Ever tomorrow, ever delayed;
That ill-aspiring shaft of light,
That unattainable perfection.
And still I reach, still strive, to gleam

A glimpse of it

I grab ahold, I am here, I am home;
Then broken-winged fall, plummet back
To dismal truth, inescapable fate.
A no-man’s land, where shattered
I stumble, exist

Numb, alone; reach, dream, jump;
Failure wounds, aftermath drowns;
And back into the vicious cycle tossed.
I am in the dark.

3.

And here, here in that eternal dilemma;
Which perhaps other share
(Though I cannot be sure)

That unattainable idealism:

That essence, that core
That son of moon, that daughter of sun,
Is there. Constant and steady
Her head swivels
Examining with bright all-knowing orbs.

And yet.
Enticing flesh, rosy-sweet
Of apple bright
It beckons. A bite.
A peck, a simple peck, a curiosity, a need
Begets a feast
And hence flutters freedom,
Out of reach yet ever in sight,
It deceives.

Tears spill akin to blood
The battle is lost.

There will be another but,

(In unbiased truth)
It will end the same.

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