marriage help: I need a good hook sentence. - Help.com

it’s written way, waaayyy too informally. ‘the other guys on the ranch’, for example.

try putting the ’small size’ and ‘lonely wife’ etc before you mention his name; ‘with his small size … curley represents …’

if that makes sense

“Curley represents the idea of not getting what you want as he is small, has a lonely wife, and does not get along wit the other people at the ranch.”

something like:
“There are many characters in the novel: “Of mice and men”, but the one that best represents the idea of things not working out the way a person wants them to is the Character “Curley”.” (then go on with the reasons)?
can you talk in first person?
like; “I think he is the best example….”
or does it have to be like “he is the best example because….”

Mas 1st wrote:
OK gave it a bit of thought.

Curley is representative of the overwhelming size of the entire problem, his difficult social interactions and failing union with his spouse only serve to highlight his diminutive stature in his own mind.

(That is the rubbish I would have written at school)- Mas

lol, for a second i read it as “and that is how ikari got a degree”
i was gonna be all like buuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurn
but that is funny too

Alpha Knight wrote:
lol, for a second i read it as “and that is how ikari got a degree”i was gonna be all like buuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurnbut that is funny too

lollercoaster.

er, what?