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this is a song that i wrote soo please nice comments…

thanx

I Try

1st Verse:
I see you, walking down the hallway
I’ve got to turn around for I have nothing to say
I try sometimes to get your attention
I try sometimes, but I never mention
Oo could somebody help me
I think I’m going cra-e-a-e-a-e-a-e-azy

Chorus:
I try, I try, I try
But you just passed me by
My heart’s beating fast and I don’t know if I’ll last
For I try, I try, I try

2nd Verse:
Now it’s a sunny spring day
And I don’t think I’ll go my way
I don’t even understand
Why I even try
You just got me confused
And I don’t what else to do-o-o-o

Chorus:
I try, I try, I try
But you just passed me by
My heart’s beating fast and I don’t know if I’ll last
For I try, I try, I try

Hook:
When I wake up in the morning
And I see it’s a brand new day
I don’t think that everything will go, will go my way
Because you’re also in mind
And I can’t leave you right behind
For all I want you to do is love, is love me to
Because without you I don’t know where else to go
Please could somebody me I’m going crazy

Chorus:
I try, I try, I try
But you just passed me by
My heart’s beating fast and I don’t know if I’ll last
For I try, I try, I…

I try, I try, I try
But you just passed me by
My heart’s beating fast and I don’t know if I’ll last
For I try, I try, I try
I try (yeaah) I try (oo, oh)
For I try

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Karoline.ponc offline Verified User (1 year, 1 month) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
An Unknown Location | 11 months, 4 weeks ago (2 minutes after post)

its hard to make a tune up in my head…
but the lyrics are good! i liiiiike!

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Vilén offline Verified User (1 year, 6 months) Long Term User Shouts: 4 #
An Undisclosed Location | 11 months, 4 weeks ago (5 minutes after post)

Ah ha, lol, I like it!

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Help me with: I am SICK of love songs.
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resurgam offline Verified User (1 year, 3 months) Long Term User Shouts: 3 #
An Undisclosed Location | 11 months, 4 weeks ago (9 minutes after post)

I like the lyrics!
Could be changed here and there to be easier to relate to, and stuff like that… but I love it honestly. It’s kind of funny, it fits the situation I’m in…
What genre were you thinking of?

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CosmicDebris offline Verified User (1 year) Long Term User Shouts: 12 #
An Unknown Location | 11 months, 4 weeks ago (37 minutes after post)

Finally someone posts a song with verse and chorus. I like it, Not really my bag but it’s well written. Good luck.

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Barbyman offline Verified User (2 years, 5 months) Long Term User Shouts: 5 #
An Unknown Location | 11 months, 3 weeks ago (2 hours, 36 minutes after post)

i like it maybe a few words here and there i would change ,but that is all..

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anapatheticguy offline Verified User (1 year, 1 month) Long Term User Shouts: 2 #
An Unknown Location | 11 months, 3 weeks ago (8 hours, 17 minutes after post)

Awesome stuff and good songwriting!

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Help me with: Hello everyone,
sydra1 offline Unverified User #
An Unknown Location | 6 months ago (5 months, 3 weeks after post)

can you give the video or just the mp3 music cause we have to know the rythm of the song but the lyrics are good congratulations

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