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Birth

I was born on an avid wasteland
where foxes snatch
their kits away
from the lingering
horned owls;
where flocks of
quail croons quiver
among the cactus and mesquite;
where the dab of
juju fruit shrinks,
slewed
before the sun,
summoning quadricals of
aqua blue to its
shore.
I was born from Leo’s gate
onto the virgins
bloodied skin.
I bleed through my skin,
through my innocents.
I was born dancing
silence
in ancient circles.
I came from passionate eyes
where stars shine
like silver dimes
or ruby gauntlets
with their brims pouring
forth the bounty of
our saviors gift;
our sins redeem us.
I come from the
horses sidestep
before the moon lets
go of the night,
or the leaf lets
the frost die
and feeds the cocooned butterfly.
I speak the word of the forbidden fruit
when the delicate dew
ravages the creases
between your moans
and scarring knife.
I speak of the surrender
of my nectar as my womb
breaks open to feed our mother.
I speak of the myth
that welds body and soul
like the flame licking
Aries.
I beg in morsels for my
lord’s love and the
thrust of betrayal.
I am estimated
only for my syntax
and the embryonic,
emblematic,
anticipation for utterance.
I speak cautiously
as if invading
the tower of Taurus,
labyrinth lies,
as if I were the lyre,
as if I were the
villain;
my words carving,
prophesized.
Be my muse,
let me abuse you,
let stiletto insomnia
seduce you.
Like the silhouette
of my voice
caressing the consecrated
drums that distort
your vision in
audible currents.
I am from
The dust of a thousand stars,
My protons electrify.
Let the apex fold into itself
And my body dies.

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Tyranid Tamer offline Verified User (12 months) Long Term User Shouts: 18 #
An Unknown Location | 11 months, 2 weeks ago (16 minutes after post)

Wow.

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An Undisclosed Location | 11 months, 2 weeks ago (17 minutes after post)

Yes, wow…heavy stuff!

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An Undisclosed Location | 11 months, 2 weeks ago (42 minutes after post)

oh yea, I forgot to say that I’m just posting this for your viewing pleasure and possibly some constructive criticism…

Thank you guys.

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chunkymove offline Verified User (1 year, 2 months) Long Term User Shouts: 19 #
An Unknown Location | 11 months, 2 weeks ago (1 hour, 27 minutes after post)

Nice.

I couldn’t get it’s flow until I read it outloud, but then got stuck for I won’t say how long trying to say “quail croons quiver”

“or the leaf lets
the frost die” - yeah, don’t know why I like this…

“I am estimated
only for my syntax
and the embryonic,
emblematic,
anticipation for utterance.”

Then I read this and I’m stuck. I feel like now you don’t want to hear the bits I liked…

oh, and was it innocents or innocence? Probably just like you wrote it, and me trying to understand it to literally.

Thanks for sharing GP.

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An Undisclosed Location | 11 months, 2 weeks ago (2 hours, 8 minutes after post)

Thanks for sharing this.

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Gypsy Pirate offline Verified User (1 year) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 11 months, 2 weeks ago (2 hours, 31 minutes after post)

it really does have to be read out loud. “quail croons quiver” is one of my favorite ones. there’s a word for like that I just can’t remember it right now. It’s filled with a whole lot of symbolism and archetype so it’s good that you got stuck. It means that you’re actually analyzing it.

it was innocence…

How about the end? Is it good enough? Does it fit with the rest of the poem? I’m self conscious about it because my sister said she doesn’t get it… but never gets anything to do with me.

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chunkymove offline Verified User (1 year, 2 months) Long Term User Shouts: 19 #
An Unknown Location | 11 months, 2 weeks ago (3 hours, 17 minutes after post)

Stuck as in its a tounge twister. I’d like to pretend it was all the symbolism and archetype…

About the end and fitting and getting it. I don’t pretend to get it, not one of my skills, but the beginning has “you” being born, and the end just the body dies, giving an idea of ongoing self without body?

Poetry perhaps better
left slighly un-got?
if not,
then for understanding
whats the plot?

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Sasha101 offline Verified User (1 year, 2 months) Long Term User Shouts: 6 #
An Undisclosed Location | 11 months, 2 weeks ago (9 hours, 8 minutes after post)

Beautiful Gypsy, keep writing hon, you have some talent there :D

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An Unknown Location | 11 months, 2 weeks ago (22 hours, 25 minutes after post)

very good, its a bit long in my view but i have quite a narrow taste… ;)

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exaltitud offline Verified User (9 months, 1 week) Long Term User Shouts: 0 #
An Unknown Location | 9 months, 1 week ago (2 months, 1 week after post)

Wow dude, that was deep. Good job! =)

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Gypsy Pirate offline Verified User (1 year) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 9 months ago (2 months, 1 week after post)

haha. hey, if you ever get bored and feel like reading my other stuff here’s the website: http://www.webook.com/projects.aspx?p…

Thanks again for the compliments.

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Gypsy Pirate offline Verified User (1 year) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 8 months ago (3 months, 1 week after post)

so Chunkymove… you were absolutely correct about the continuation of self after death. absolutely. you get it more than anyone ever has. ummm…. yea.

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chunkymove offline Verified User (1 year, 2 months) Long Term User Shouts: 19 #
An Unknown Location | 7 months, 3 weeks ago (3 months, 2 weeks after post)

wooo!!

rewarded for paying attention - I like art like that. Hmmm, not just art, but everything really.

will read some webook but only because I am totally bored and there are no other books around…. :-)

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