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onomatopoeia

picked up the phone

There was once a dog. It was a golden retriever and it was ADORABLE. And had puppies with the neighbors golden retriever.

Oh wait, was onomatopoeia the beginning? Oh crap I screwed this up already didn’t I? Ok, ok, here goes.

Onomatopoeia picked up the phone, replying with it’s characteristic boom

You have to redo it Devil, it’s gotta be help.com, not the example. lol I’m such a dumb a$$

Onomatopoeia picked up the phone, replying with it’s characteristic boom. It was onomatopoeia oldest friend, echo

Oh!!! TYPO add the apostrophe for me will yeh?

Fresh Start:

There was once a humble dragon kinght by the name of Devil_on_Earth. The king had dispatched him to take out ThimbleThorn the Grey when he_________

There was once a humble dragon knight by the name of Devil_on_Earth. The king had dispatched herto take out Thimblethorn the Grey when he realized he had to tie his shoe. He bent over only to find he was wearing sandels. Realizing he needed boots for her adventure she decided to buy some boots.

sorry devil, i typed he again

What’s this, a second story? Well, I guess that means we should continue both, but two is the limit. No more new stories!

PS. Including yourself may not have been such a wise decision, who knows what people are going to make of you. Trust me, they’re wild out there! o.o

Oh, well, that isn’t fair! See what I mean? They might make anything out of this.

There was once a humble dragon knight by the name of Devil_on_Earth. The king had dispatched him to take out Thimblethorn the Grey when he realized he had to tie his show. He bent over only to find that he was wearing sandles. Realizing he needed boots for her adventure she decided to buy some boots.

There was one problem. DOE’s only weakness was shopping. Without even realizing that her feet were just plodding one in front of the other, she found herself at the market, wondering where to start…and when it would end!

Uh oh, another typo “to tie his show. ”

There was once a humble dragon knight by the name of Devil_on_Earth. The king had dispatched him to take out Thimblethorn the Grey when he realized he had to tie his show. He bent over only to find that he was wearing sandles. Realizing he needed boots for her adventure she decided to buy some boots.

There was one problem. DOE’s only weakness was shopping. Without even realizing that her feet were just plodding one in front of the other, she found herself at the market, wondering where to start…and when it would end!

She browsed the aisles, looking for the boots that would serve the mission’s purpose. Desperation to find where Thimblethorn was taking refuge, managed to stay herself from the other shops momentarily. But if she didn’t find a skilled sole smith soon, she fears for what would remain of her purse.

Why don’t we write a real story. This is obviously turning into a travesty.

I have to agree with mills, this story is going nowhere real fast…I thought the onomatopoeia might’ve been funny, but could’ve turned out just as dull.

So….do over?

A man asked google for help with his ipod, and found a blog about them on help.com.

It went on to say how they distract the public from that which surrounds them, defacing the name of ipod and that he loves about it. The man felt displeased.

Your supposed to copy and paste like this

A man asked google for help with his ipod, and found a blog about them on help.com. It went on to say how they distract the public from that which surrounds them, defacing the name of ipod and that he loves about it. The man felt displeased.

Holy, Story 5-O - careful everyone - the heat is on patrole

Honestly, the heat? I’m mean I’m hot and stuff, but…do I really need to be labeled?

Well as long as it’s about my hotness, I’ll let this one slide. Next time I’m labeled, it’ll be usurper as the next new character in the storyline. And if the 5-0 is hot and on patrole, well you can imagine the rest :D

Quantum_Spirit wrote:
Honestly, the heat? I’m mean I’m hot and stuff, but…do I really need to be labeled?

Well as long as it’s about my hotness, I’ll let this one slide. Next time I’m labeled, it’ll be usurper as the next new character in the storyline. And if the 5-0 is hot and on patrole, well you can imagine the rest :D

Bring it

Oh, it’s already been broughten! :P

I think, no matter how much seriousness you have in your voice, you cannot say “bring it” and not get “Oh, it’s already been broughten! :P” as a response for say 60,000 km. and at least another 5 years.

Quantum_Spirit wrote:
Oh, it’s already been broughten! :P

Quantum_Spirit wrote:
Oh, it’s already been broughten! :P

Prove it science man

Science man…hey that’s a label!

Fine you forced my hand.

A man asked google for help with his ipod, and found a blog about them on help.com. It went on to say how they distract the public from that which surrounds them, defacing the name of ipod and that he loves about it. The man felt displeased.

He went to back to the Google search list, hoping that someone would tell him why his music won’t go on the $400 dollar mp3 player he bought for his son. He found another blog site written under the alias Usurper with the quote “…putting songs on my ipod…”

The man clicked and continued to read what he thought was about ipod’s but turned to be of a much more intriguing nature.

……

Usurper:Dammnit, my room mate keeps putting songs on my ipod that I don’t wan’t on there. Help me get of this stuff. Why did I say he could borrow it in the first place?

Science_Man: You have to take the songs out of the itunes folder, yeah like that.

Hot_5-0: Excuse me ladies, I’m just doing a random character check for our website forums. Are you girls behaving yourselves?

Usurper: Hey, um, just a quick question officer, um what’s the online equivalent of your nightstick? Is there anything you can do to us, or is just talk.

Hot_5-0: Eghem..Well let me tell you little lady, there is lots I can do members like yourselves. But that isn’t the kind of question I’d expect from innocent user. You know I heard there was a lot of heat happening in these “help” forums. There’s a reason why they call me Hot_5_0, and that’s because, I have reputation. A reputation of staying on top of the hot stuff. That’s you ladies!

Usurper: Hot stuff, huh? Well just how to do you stay on top? I mean, if we’re so hot shouldn’t we be on top? Heat rises, that’s what they say right science_man?

Science_Man: Why yes, that is what they say. They also say what goes up must come down, but I’m having an awfully hard time getting something down all by my lonesome.

Usurper: What exactly are you referring to Science_Man? Why are you standing behind that tall chair? Why don’t you come over here and explain yourself.

Sorry for the typos, I forget to change it up with the addition of science_man

Here’s the revision

A man asked google for help with his ipod, and found a blog about them on help.com. It went on to say how they distract the public from that which surrounds them, defacing the name of ipod and that he loves about it. The man felt displeased.

He went to back to the Google search list, hoping that someone would tell him why his music won’t go on the $400 dollar mp3 player he bought for his son. He found another blog site written under the alias Usurper with the quote “…putting songs on my ipod…”

The man clicked and continued to read what he thought was about ipod’s but turned to be of a much more intriguing nature.

……

Usurper:Dammnit, my room mate keeps putting songs on my ipod that I don’t wan’t on there. Help me get this stuff off. Why did I say he could borrow it in the first place?

Science_Man: You have to take the songs out of the itunes folder, yeah like that.

Hot_5-0: Excuse me girl and gent, I’m just doing a random character check for our website forums. Are you two behaving yourselves?

Usurper: Us? Of course we are. Hey, um, just a quick question officer, um what’s the online equivalent of your nightstick? Is there anything you can do to us, or is it just talk.

Hot_5-0: Eghem..Well let me tell you little lady, there is lots I can do to members like yourselves. But that isn’t the kind of question I’d expect from an innocent user. You know I heard there was a lot of heat happening in these “help” forums. There’s a reason why they call me Hot_5_0, and that’s because, I have reputation. A reputation of staying on top of the hot stuff. That’s you miss! So your going to have come with me to my interrogation forum.

Usurper: Hot stuff, huh? Well just how to do you stay on top? I mean, if we’re so hot shouldn’t we be on top? Heat rises, that’s what they say right science_man?

CriminalMinds007 wrote:
Okay since almost all of you have no idea what you’re doing I’m going to close this post and come back and make a new one with CLEAR instructions. But not yet, because I’m busy.

Ha ha - hater

The previous line should precede every new line. That is how stories become consistent and are more likely to hold the interest of the reader. Each sentence deserves a steady transition which will facilitate everything being conveyed. Unless of course we’re describing action. Then every sentence could possibly be extremely astounding in its transition. This is only a slight suggestion as to how we can improve are authorship technique

Our* This mistake is very painful to accept so I hope you all will understand the level of embarrassment for me.

mills wrote:
The previous line should precede every new line. That is how stories become consistent and are more likely to hold the interest of the reader. Each sentence deserves a steady transition which will facilitate everything being conveyed. Unless of course we’re describing action. Then every sentence could possibly be extremely astounding in its transition. This is only a slight suggestion as to how we can improve are authorship technique

Very true. I’m glad there are individuals as wise as you on help.com

mills wrote:
Our* This mistake is very painful to accept so I hope you all will understand the level of embarrassment for me.

What, that you used are instead of our?

Hey is that a form of dyslexia? I do it quite often as well.

Ok so

A man asked google for help with his ipod, and found a blog about them on help.com. It went on to say how they distract the public from that which surrounds them, defacing the name of ipod and that he loves about it. The man felt displeased.

He went to back to the Google search list, hoping that someone would tell him why his music won’t go on the $400 dollar mp3 player he bought for his son. He found another blog site written under the alias Usurper with the quote “…putting songs on my ipod…”

The man clicked and continued to read what he thought was about ipod’s but turned to be of a much more intriguing nature.

……

Usurper:Dammnit, my room mate keeps putting songs on my ipod that I don’t wan’t on there. Help me get this stuff off. Why did I say he could borrow it in the first place?

Science_Man: You have to take the songs out of the itunes folder, yeah like that.

Hot_5-0: Excuse me girl and gent, I’m just doing a random character check for our website forums. Are you two behaving yourselves?

Usurper: Us? Of course we are. Hey, um, just a quick question officer, um what’s the online equivalent of your nightstick? Is there anything you can do to us, or is it just talk.

Hot_5-0: Eghem..Well let me tell you little lady, there is lots I can do to members like yourselves. But that isn’t the kind of question I’d expect from an innocent user. You know I heard there was a lot of heat happening in these “help” forums. There’s a reason why they call me Hot_5_0, and that’s because, I have reputation. A reputation of staying on top of the hot stuff. That’s you miss! So your going to have come with me to my interrogation forum.

Usurper: Hot stuff, huh? Well just how to do you stay on top? I mean, if we’re so hot shouldn’t we be on top? Heat rises, that’s what they say right science_man?

Science_Man: Why yes, that is what they say. They also say what goes up must come down, but I’m having an awfully hard time getting something down all by my lonesome.

Usurper: What exactly are you referring to Science_Man? Why are you standing behind that tall chair? Why don’t you come over here and explain yourself.

Ok so

A man asked google for help with his ipod, and found a blog about them on help.com. It went on to say how they distract the public from that which surrounds them, defacing the name of ipod and that he loves about it. The man felt displeased.

He went to back to the Google search list, hoping that someone would tell him why his music won’t go on the $400 dollar mp3 player he bought for his son. He found another blog site written under the alias Usurper with the quote “…putting songs on my ipod…”

The man clicked and continued to read what he thought was about ipod’s but turned to be of a much more intriguing nature.

……

Usurper:Dammnit, my room mate keeps putting songs on my ipod that I don’t wan’t on there. Help me get this stuff off. Why did I say he could borrow it in the first place?

Science_Man: You have to take the songs out of the itunes folder, yeah like that.

Hot_5-0: Excuse me girl and gent, I’m just doing a random character check for our website forums. Are you two behaving yourselves?

Usurper: Us? Of course we are. Hey, um, just a quick question officer, um what’s the online equivalent of your nightstick? Is there anything you can do to us, or is it just talk.

Hot_5-0: Eghem..Well let me tell you little lady, there is lots I can do to members like yourselves. But that isn’t the kind of question I’d expect from an innocent user. You know I heard there was a lot of heat happening in these “help” forums. There’s a reason why they call me Hot_5_0, and that’s because, I have reputation. A reputation of staying on top of the hot stuff. That’s you miss! So your going to have come with me to my interrogation forum.

Usurper: Hot stuff, huh? Well just how to do you stay on top? I mean, if we’re so hot shouldn’t we be on top? Heat rises, that’s what they say right science_man?

Science_Man: Why yes, that is what they say. They also say what goes up must come down, but I’m having an awfully hard time getting something down all by my lonesome.

Usurper: What exactly are you referring to Science_Man? Why are you standing behind that tall chair? Why don’t you come over here and explain yourself.

Science_Man: How is it that you can see me, Usurper?

Usurper: *blushes* DO I have to say?

Hot_5-0: It sounds like you are in fact behaving badly, just as I suspected. What do you have to say for yourself?

usurper wrote:

mills wrote:
Our* This mistake is very painful to accept so I hope you all will understand the level of embarrassment for me.

What, that you used are instead of our?

Hey is that a form of dyslexia? I do it quite often as well.

Sorry for the delay. Yes, I have been told that I suffer from dyslexia quite often. So often now, that I am beginning to believe it is true. I’m sure my oppressive work schedule is also a chief factor for my misused word.

mills wrote:

usurper wrote:

mills wrote:
Our* This mistake is very painful to accept so I hope you all will understand the level of embarrassment for me.

What, that you used are instead of our?

Hey is that a form of dyslexia? I do it quite often as well.

Sorry for the delay. Yes, I have been told that I suffer from dyslexia quite often. So often now, that I am beginning to believe it is true. I’m sure my oppressive work schedule is also a chief factor for my misused word.

Excuses excuses