True story everyone.
I just got back from vacation to all of these locations.
Malaga, Spain
The faint roar of crashing waves rolling in matches the aura of the fresh, salty air. I lightly tread to the end of the veranda, my brow tightened slightly, my eyes squinting in the bright light of the early dawn. As one other hand pulled my drink closer to my mouth, the other gripped the pen upon which I was to write.
“Commitment is a large undertaking for man, my querito”, I began to write. I glanced below and saw the sun in it’s full entirety, break through the open sky, a deep lasting fire. Following what it does, everyday, a predictable routine, same old same old. What I’m so afraid of.
I looked up, as I gently allowed my pen to fall from my clenched fingers, and it rushed downwards, loudly landing on the wood boards below. It fell, rushed, out of my grasp, just like you with me, I thought. I stared at the writing instrument, blankly, my mind wandering, sifting through thoughts as murky as swirling storm drains…Where’s the storm in our lives? I decided to write later, maybe when the weather is more unpredictable .
7 days Later
Milan, Italy
She pulls me close. Her incredibly dark hair is so… so.. Invigorating, attractive, exotic. The curl of her Italian lips invites my touch, her features desiring mine.
The beautiful shops below have stopped their hustle and flow, and are only a faint murmur in the ever so near distance. Our conversation we’ve had since we met at the pool has carried on, her lingering voice wavering slightly like smoke in the dusky air. The chair I sit on feels weak, sweaty, as if I could fall through these weaved patterns, ruining this moment.
She smiles, and politely asks me in broken English to step closer. We’re on a terrace overlooking a small vineyard of ruby tomatoes and a smattering of olive trees. The air is rich, heavy in heat and feeling. Her cheeks are flushed, a dark rouge, complimenting the fallibility within her eyes. The glowing of the red lantern to our right flickers, once, twice, before it reignites, mimicking my own heart rate. That feeling where the air stops, our faces begin to slant down, and our feet won’t touch the ground wash over me. Her tall, beautiful frame is everything I need. Man desires this.
We lean in. But I know this isn’t right, isn’t what I want, and isn’t best for me. I gently pull away and whisper to her ‘I’m sorry.”
I give pace to a faster step and leave her in disbelief.
14 days Later
Toronto, Canada
I spin. I see her, the real girl for me. I hold her. We fade, casting our cares to the stars, like comets on summer nights. My shivers make me sigh. My sighs make your mouth curl into a smile. Undefinable, perfect, stable. Commitment foreseeable.
This is my life. True story.
http://tylerstunna.blogspot.com/
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Rawrr wrote:
wow thats ‘mazinn.your an awesome writer x
thank you! i think nothing beats true life stories =)
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Stunna wrote:
Rawrr wrote:
wow thats ‘mazinn.your an awesome writer x
thank you! i think nothing beats true life stories =)
i agree very much so! i love reliving great moments when i write them. x
i haven’t touched my stories in so long. Reading this made me want to. Thanks :)
Great story mate! Keep up the good writing!!!! :)
darkscorpia wrote:
i haven’t touched my stories in so long. Reading this made me want to. Thanks :)
did you write 100 words after reading this?!
Nice story Stunna. I plan to write more later.
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True story everyone.
Malaga, Spain
The faint roar of crashing waves rolling in matches the aura of the fresh, salty air. I lightly tread to the end of the veranda, my brow tightened slightly, my eyes squinting in the bright light of the early dawn. As one other hand pulled my drink closer to my mouth, the other gripped the pen upon which I was to write.
“Commitment is a large undertaking for man, my querito”, I began to write. I glanced below and saw the sun in it’s full entirety, break through the open sky, a deep lasting fire. Following what it does, everyday, a routine, same old same old. What I’m so afraid of.
I dropped my pen loudly and decided to write later, maybe when the weather is more unpredictable .
2 Weeks Later
Milan, Italy
She pulls me close. Her incredibly dark hair is so… so.. Invigorating, attractive, exotic. The curl of her Italian lips invites my touch, her features desiring mine.
The beautiful shops below have stopped their hussle and flow, and are only a faint murmur in the ever so near distance. Our conversation we’ve had since we met at the pool has carried on, her lingering voice wavering slightly like smoke in the dusky air.
She smiles, and politely asks me in broken English to step closer. We’re on a terrace overlooking a small vineyard of ruby tomatoes and a smattering of olive trees. The air is rich, heavy in heat and feeling. Her cheeks are flushed, a dark rouge, complimenting the fallibility within her eyes. The glowing of the red lantern to our right flickers, once, twice, before it reignites, mimicking my own heart rate. That feeling where the air stops, our faces begin to slant down, and our feet won’t touch the ground wash over me. Her tall, beautiful frame is everything I need. Man desires this.
We lean in. But I know this isn’t right, isn’t what I want, and isn’t best for me. I gently pull away and whisper to her ‘I’m sorry.”
I give pace to a faster step and leave her in disbelief.
14 days Later
Toronto, Canada
I spin. I see her. I hold her. We fade, casting our cares to the stars, like comets on summer nights. Undefinable, perfect.
This is my life. True story.
http://tylerstunna.blogspot.com/
Stunna edited this post 4 months, 1 week ago. Read the previous text »
True story everyone. I just got back from vacation to all of these locations.
Malaga, Spain
The faint roar of crashing waves rolling in matches the aura of the fresh, salty air. I lightly tread to the end of the veranda, my brow tightened slightly, my eyes squinting in the bright light of the early dawn. As one other hand pulled my drink closer to my mouth, the other gripped the pen upon which I was to write.
“Commitment is a large undertaking for man, my querito”, I began to write. I glanced below and saw the sun in it’s full entirety, break through the open sky, a deep lasting fire. Following what it does, everyday, a predictable routine, same old same old. What I’m so afraid of.
I softly allowed my pen to fall my grasp, and it rushed downwards, loudly landing on the wood boards below with a soft clank. I stared it at the writing instrument, blankly, my mind wandering, sifting through thoughts as murky as back water canals in Venice. I decided to write later, maybe when the weather is more unpredictable .
2 Weeks Later
Milan, Italy
She pulls me close. Her incredibly dark hair is so… so.. Invigorating, attractive, exotic. The curl of her Italian lips invites my touch, her features desiring mine.
The beautiful shops below have stopped their hustle and flow, and are only a faint murmur in the ever so near distance. Our conversation we’ve had since we met at the pool has carried on, her lingering voice wavering slightly like smoke in the dusky air.
She smiles, and politely asks me in broken English to step closer. We’re on a terrace overlooking a small vineyard of ruby tomatoes and a smattering of olive trees. The air is rich, heavy in heat and feeling. Her cheeks are flushed, a dark rouge, complimenting the fallibility within her eyes. The glowing of the red lantern to our right flickers, once, twice, before it reignites, mimicking my own heart rate. That feeling where the air stops, our faces begin to slant down, and our feet won’t touch the ground wash over me. Her tall, beautiful frame is everything I need. Man desires this.
We lean in. But I know this isn’t right, isn’t what I want, and isn’t best for me. I gently pull away and whisper to her ‘I’m sorry.”
I give pace to a faster step and leave her in disbelief.
14 days Later
Toronto, Canada
I spin. I see her. I hold her. We fade, casting our cares to the stars, like comets on summer nights. My shivers make me sigh. My sighs make your mouth curl into a smile. Undefinable, perfect.
This is my life. True story.
http://tylerstunna.blogspot.com/
that was a beautiful story!
Stunna wrote:
darkscorpia wrote:
i haven’t touched my stories in so long. Reading this made me want to. Thanks :)did you write 100 words after reading this?!
I wrote more in all seriousness xD You’re a very good writer. It has rhythm, it flows. Beautiful and descriptive. And great ending :D
(I wish I had money for travel!)
Stunna,
What a coincidence that she ended up in a second country and you just happened to be there! That sounds pretty incredible. I’m surprised that you didn’t kiss her, but then again, you clearly state that she isn’t what you want and isn’t right for you. At least you knew these things. Many people don’t think about those things until after they get involved. It’s not always easy to leave by then. It shows a high level of maturity on your part. Being in a bad relationship can make life so much harder! Long distance relationships seldom seem to work. I wish you luck finding the lady of your dreams.
dove7 wrote:
(I wish I had money for travel!)Stunna,
What a coincidence that she ended up in a second country and you just happened to be there! That sounds pretty incredible. I’m surprised that you didn’t kiss her, but then again, you clearly state that she isn’t what you want and isn’t right for you. At least you knew these things. Many people don’t think about those things until after they get involved. It’s not always easy to leave by then. It shows a high level of maturity on your part. Being in a bad relationship can make life so much harder! Long distance relationships seldom seem to work. I wish you luck finding the lady of your dreams.
I didn’t pay to travel though, haha I went with my family to Spain, France, Italy, Gibraltar. I’m blessed I know! This girl I’m writing about I met in Italy, but in reality, I have someone back home in Canada, which is why I walked away from her. Which is why the part about Spain is about a letter to this girl in Canada. I re-wrote a part of this to make it less confusing. And long distance relationships are really a waste of time, as harsh as that sounds. They are so unfair on both parties, truly. In fact dating at my age is almost a waste of time until people mature, like after the age of 25 =)
Stunna edited this post 4 months, 1 week ago. Read the previous text »
True story everyone. I just got back from vacation to all of these locations.
Malaga, Spain
The faint roar of crashing waves rolling in matches the aura of the fresh, salty air. I lightly tread to the end of the veranda, my brow tightened slightly, my eyes squinting in the bright light of the early dawn. As one other hand pulled my drink closer to my mouth, the other gripped the pen upon which I was to write.
“Commitment is a large undertaking for man, my querito”, I began to write. I glanced below and saw the sun in it’s full entirety, break through the open sky, a deep lasting fire. Following what it does, everyday, a predictable routine, same old same old. What I’m so afraid of.
I looked up, as I gently allowed my pen to fall from my clenched fingers, and it rushed downwards, loudly landing on the wood boards below. It fell, rushed, out of my grasp, just like you with me. I stared it at the writing instrument, blankly, my mind wandering, sifting through thoughts as murky as back water canals in Venice.I decided to write later, maybe when the weather is more unpredictable .
2 Weeks Later
Milan, Italy
She pulls me close. Her incredibly dark hair is so… so.. Invigorating, attractive, exotic. The curl of her Italian lips invites my touch, her features desiring mine.
The beautiful shops below have stopped their hustle and flow, and are only a faint murmur in the ever so near distance. Our conversation we’ve had since we met at the pool has carried on, her lingering voice wavering slightly like smoke in the dusky air.
She smiles, and politely asks me in broken English to step closer. We’re on a terrace overlooking a small vineyard of ruby tomatoes and a smattering of olive trees. The air is rich, heavy in heat and feeling. Her cheeks are flushed, a dark rouge, complimenting the fallibility within her eyes. The glowing of the red lantern to our right flickers, once, twice, before it reignites, mimicking my own heart rate. That feeling where the air stops, our faces begin to slant down, and our feet won’t touch the ground wash over me. Her tall, beautiful frame is everything I need. Man desires this.
We lean in. But I know this isn’t right, isn’t what I want, and isn’t best for me. I gently pull away and whisper to her ‘I’m sorry.”
I give pace to a faster step and leave her in disbelief.
14 days Later
Toronto, Canada
I spin. I see her. I hold her. We fade, casting our cares to the stars, like comets on summer nights. My shivers make me sigh. My sighs make your mouth curl into a smile. Undefinable, perfect.
This is my life. True story.
http://tylerstunna.blogspot.com/
Anonymous wrote:
Nice story Stunna. I plan to write more later.
I’d be excited to see what you write! link me please either way!!
darkscorpia wrote:
Stunna wrote:
darkscorpia wrote:
i haven’t touched my stories in so long. Reading this made me want to. Thanks :)did you write 100 words after reading this?!
I wrote more in all seriousness xD You’re a very good writer. It has rhythm, it flows. Beautiful and descriptive. And great ending :D
post your writing!
and awe haha thank you!!
Stunna edited this post 4 months, 1 week ago. Read the previous text »
True story everyone. I just got back from vacation to all of these locations.
Malaga, Spain
The faint roar of crashing waves rolling in matches the aura of the fresh, salty air. I lightly tread to the end of the veranda, my brow tightened slightly, my eyes squinting in the bright light of the early dawn. As one other hand pulled my drink closer to my mouth, the other gripped the pen upon which I was to write.
“Commitment is a large undertaking for man, my querito”, I began to write. I glanced below and saw the sun in it’s full entirety, break through the open sky, a deep lasting fire. Following what it does, everyday, a predictable routine, same old same old. What I’m so afraid of.
I looked up, as I gently allowed my pen to fall from my clenched fingers, and it rushed downwards, loudly landing on the wood boards below. It fell, rushed, out of my grasp, just like you with me, I thought. I stared at the writing instrument, blankly, my mind wandering, sifting through thoughts as murky as swirling storm drains…Where’s the storm in our lives? I decided to write later, maybe when the weather is more unpredictable .
2 Weeks Later
Milan, Italy
She pulls me close. Her incredibly dark hair is so… so.. Invigorating, attractive, exotic. The curl of her Italian lips invites my touch, her features desiring mine.
The beautiful shops below have stopped their hustle and flow, and are only a faint murmur in the ever so near distance. Our conversation we’ve had since we met at the pool has carried on, her lingering voice wavering slightly like smoke in the dusky air. The chair I sit on feels weak, sweaty, as if I could fall through these weaved patterns, ruining this moment.
She smiles, and politely asks me in broken English to step closer. We’re on a terrace overlooking a small vineyard of ruby tomatoes and a smattering of olive trees. The air is rich, heavy in heat and feeling. Her cheeks are flushed, a dark rouge, complimenting the fallibility within her eyes. The glowing of the red lantern to our right flickers, once, twice, before it reignites, mimicking my own heart rate. That feeling where the air stops, our faces begin to slant down, and our feet won’t touch the ground wash over me. Her tall, beautiful frame is everything I need. Man desires this.
We lean in. But I know this isn’t right, isn’t what I want, and isn’t best for me. I gently pull away and whisper to her ‘I’m sorry.”
I give pace to a faster step and leave her in disbelief.
14 days Later
Toronto, Canada
I spin. I see her, the real girl for me. I hold her. We fade, casting our cares to the stars, like comets on summer nights. My shivers make me sigh. My sighs make your mouth curl into a smile. Undefinable, perfect, stable. Commitment foreseeable.
This is my life. True story.
http://tylerstunna.blogspot.com/
Pretty much all that i can say to that is “It must be nice to have rich parents!” LOL. You’re spot on with the part about long distance relationships.
I missed you amazing…writings? I would say stories, but some of them are poems…so yeah. That was amazing though. Just that little chunk made me want to devour the rest of it. More please? PLEASE?!??
Kanabi wrote:
I missed you amazing…writings? I would say stories, but some of them are poems…so yeah. That was amazing though. Just that little chunk made me want to devour the rest of it. More please? PLEASE?!??
haha what would you like me to write about?
playground adventures, driving adventures, lake adventures or a party ?
just pick one.
umm…lake adventures. You’re so lucky you can write like this. I’m amazed. :D
Kanabi wrote:
umm…lake adventures. You’re so lucky you can write like this. I’m amazed. :D
thanksss
I wrote a new one but i’ll post it when i get home later tonight, i wrote it in 15 so its not quality yet, let me edit it later!
alright. I wrote something about a glass once in five minutes. Dont even ask >>
Kanabi wrote:
alright. I wrote something about a glass once in five minutes. Dont even ask >>
hahaha WHY ABOUT A GLASS?
my latest entry.
http://help.com/post/293878-my-latest…
my site:
it was for something to “cure” my writers block. It was…interesting to say the least. I loved your poem!!!
Kanabi wrote:
it was for something to “cure” my writers block. It was…interesting to say the least. I loved your poem!!!
thank you!! SHOW ME YOUR POEM!!
The glass one? I dont think I have it…if I do, I’ll publish it.Stunna wrote:
Kanabi wrote:
it was for something to “cure” my writers block. It was…interesting to say the least. I loved your poem!!!thank you!! SHOW ME YOUR POEM!!
whoa that’s really crazy.
like, blows your mind crazy and crazy that that happened to you.
WAIT, you’re getting married!?
OR ARE YOU MARRIED!?
lol.
one critique, maybe the oldest one in the book, show don’t tell.
you have amazing DESCRIPTIONS, but I feel that the story has TOO MUCH description and not enough action for the reader to infer everything that’s going on.
Helixer wrote:
whoa that’s really crazy.
like, blows your mind crazy and crazy that that happened to you.
WAIT, you’re getting married!?
OR ARE YOU MARRIED!?
lol.one critique, maybe the oldest one in the book, show don’t tell.
you have amazing DESCRIPTIONS, but I feel that the story has TOO MUCH description and not enough action for the reader to infer everything that’s going on.
haha i just rarely date, if ever (my own decision), so its surprising i decided to settle down.
Fairly good critique, I realize its very descriptive, and maybe it works against itself even with its lack of action. Thank you!!!!
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