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Here is a song i wrote, tell me honestly how bad it is please.

i want to know how to make it good also. and dont worry i know its not good.

Verse 1

What is happening to me
I am so confused
We used to be
Such good friends
But that has changed
Now that I’m in love with you
I am so confused

Chorus

I am so confused
What’s going on in my head
Do I love you
Or just want to be friends
Whats a girl to do
When she is so confused

Verse 2

What will happen to us
If I tell you I love you
Do I really have to choose
To be friends or more than that
And if we get together, then break up
How will our friendship last

Verse 3

Your smile makes me melt
But you can’t keep a promise
You make me laugh till I cry
But what’s with all these lies
And how could I have been so blind
To not see who you really are

Bridge

I want to tell you I love you
But first I need to find out if I really do
Sometimes youre amazinf
Later you break my heart
Youre making me so confused

so yeah plz help

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Beautiful Redemption offline Verified User (4 months, 3 weeks) Long Term User Shouts: 0 #
An Undisclosed Location | 4 months, 3 weeks ago (4 minutes after post)

I like…but

Verse 3

Your smile makes me melt
But you can’t keep a promise
You make me laugh till I cry
But what’s with all these lies
And how could I have been so blind
To not see who you really are

this part doesn’t go with the conflict you felt in the beginning. It was about the confusion of them being your friend, now they’re a liar? Now I’m the one that’s confused. Let the thoughts flow and try not to jumble.

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hsmfrea offline Verified User (2 years, 6 months) Long Term User Shouts: 0 #
An Unknown Location | 4 months, 3 weeks ago (5 minutes after post)

oh yeah sory. that was not supposed to be in there. thnx how can i make it better?

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An Undisclosed Location | 4 months, 3 weeks ago (10 minutes after post)

just keep on the same topic and thought. Also there needs to be closure, or a solution. Some conflict resolution to your situation. Whether it be let’s take a chance, or maybe I’ll miss out, or it’s not worth it…? something to help close the issue. It’s almost like you have many issues with no closure, they’re just open ended. Listen to songs you like. Really really listen and follow the words and story. It’s like any story, there’s background, conflict, climax, resolution. Usually the verses explain the background leading to conflict (can be used in chorus) then usually the bridge is the crescendo leading to the climax then a decrescendo bringing the listener to the resolution.

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An Unknown Location | 4 months, 3 weeks ago (10 minutes after post)

and here is a small part of a song that i gave up on

As I sit here all alone
Wishing you didnt have to go
I think of how you’ve loved me
I remember all you’ve done for me
I cherish those memories

That twinkle in your eyes
Would always bring a smile
When you called my name
Everything was worth while
Not matter how I was feeling
You brought shear joy
Now those are just memories

You were my encouragement
You kept me going strong
But since you left
Each day seems twice as long
I need you back with me
Need to see you again
Maybe you can lift my spirits
And we can still be friends

Lately it’s been so lonely
Dull and boring all the time
I want you to save me from this
So I can call you mine

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An Unknown Location | 4 months, 3 weeks ago (15 minutes after post)

I agree with hsmfrea get rid of that verse all together and some of it is not quite in Order To sing or play.I was just humming it certain things didn’t feel right,but work on it and it could be worth listening to…

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An Unknown Location | 4 months, 3 weeks ago (20 minutes after post)

well thnx. i never put a tune to it. all the tunes i have tried sounded cheesy so yeah.

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