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Yay for poems!

Especially depressing ones. Those are my speciality LOL. Don’t worry, I intend to write more happy ones…not that I haven’t before :P and btw, the periods are for spacing.

I remember the way it felt

When I first ran out to you

The way you looked at me,

Like I was the last person you wanted to see.

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A premonition,

A passing fear that rippled under my skin.

I got in the car and talked fast and loud,

All the while wondering…how?

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You were quieter that day,

The wind blowing in through the windows

Supplied our conversation.

Fear, unhappiness–a new sensation

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The words were out of me

In a tight, uncomfortable moment–

You having seconds thoughts again?

I prayed that you’d just grin.

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But there was no smile on your face,

As you carefully nodded your head.

Flights of words landed in my mind,

Had I done something this time?

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We got to your house, and I followed you,

As you skirted around the edges

Silent as ever, I took a deep breath

Knowing the worst but hoping the best.

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And then we sat on the swings

You talked in a low voice that I couldn’t–

Wouldn’t–understand.

I just wanted to hold your hand…

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The longest, most painful talk of my life,

As the cheery blue sky and bright sun

Seemed to mock us mercilessly.

And then you were silent, thankfully.

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I barely heard a word you said,

Only the parts I needed to hear.

I looked up at the sky–I didn’t care

But on the inside I felt vulnerable, bare.

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Anything I can do to fix this? I asked.

But there was no answer, and

I moved to another swing.

In more mockery of me, a bird began to sing.

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Why did it seem, that the worst of all things

Happened on the most perfect days?

I let the sun warm my cheeks,

Looked in silence for the words I seeked.

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Not finding the right words,

Nor the anger or hate I desired,

You got up and proposed a game.

I rose but felt my energy drain.

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I should have just asked

For you to let me go

So I could finally let the tears fall.

But I was strong for the long haul.

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We laughed as if nothing was said,

But no kisses, no hugs,

Not tender, loving caresses,

No heartsick, chaotic, messes.

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Not on your part, at least.

My heart was dead.

That was it, I knew

The end of things untrue.

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comments?

I would put up something better but I can’t find most of my better poems…I think they’re on another computer hahaha whoops.

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An Unknown Location | 3 months, 2 weeks ago (6 minutes after post)

WoW!!! That was very heartfelt and honest. Your words drew me in. Great poem my friend. Thank you for sharing!

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An Unknown Location | 3 months, 2 weeks ago (7 minutes after post)

Eddieee wrote:
WoW!!! That was very heartfelt and honest. Your words drew me in. Great poem my friend. Thank you for sharing!

Thank YOU! (:

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An Unknown Location | 3 months, 2 weeks ago (8 hours, 32 minutes after post)

Thats really beautiful!

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lovelylolly8 wrote:
Thats really beautiful!

Thanks!

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An Unknown Location | 3 months, 2 weeks ago (3 days, 1 hour after post)

really good! i love how i can find fellow poets on this site. good one, too!

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mflzzlove wrote:
really good! i love how i can find fellow poets on this site. good one, too!

Thank you!

Check out my more recent post, We Are Young and see if you like that (:

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An Unknown Location | 3 months, 2 weeks ago (3 days, 2 hours after post)

you should check out mine. peace and branded on my skin. see if you like those ones

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An Unknown Location | 3 months, 2 weeks ago (3 days, 2 hours after post)

lucy_h wrote:

mflzzlove wrote:
really good! i love how i can find fellow poets on this site. good one, too!

Thank you!

Check out my more recent post, We Are Young and see if you like that (:

wow. that was really good. amazingly good.
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you can also check out Waiting, if you like.

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An Unknown Location | 3 months, 2 weeks ago (4 days, 18 hours after post)

I have posted a poem on here, i would be extremley grateful if you could tell me what you think :)
It’s called this darkness throbbing and whole is more alive than you can comprehend. Well thats the first line and title :) x

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