Please read my poem and find a title for it.

pink sparkle

Please read my poem and find a title for it.

I’d paint my Love a rainbow
But my heart is pouring rain.
The clouds avoid the sun’s glow.
The strom brings out the pain.

I’d pocket you the sunshine
but you took it when you went.
Since then the sun I cannot find,
Though weeks of search I spent.

Come back and color the garden
That once bloomed like spring.
Bring in the light from Eden
And the blue birds that sing.

I’ll wait for you in this winter frost.
I’ll face each strom at sea.
Each time I pray, I ask the most,
That you’ll come back to marry me.

So hurry home do not delay.
Bring back the sun and the summer day.

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~LazyDaze~ 447 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (1 minute after post)

Nice..

How about something like, bitter sweet?
Or Frozen?

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pink sparkle 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (6 minutes after post)

~LazyDaze~ wrote:
Nice..

How about something like, bitter sweet?
Or Frozen?

Thanks…

I’m looking for a title that says I’m in so much pain and that the only cure is his “will you marry me?”

~LazyDaze~ 447 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (8 minutes after post)

Breathless love?

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pink sparkle 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (9 minutes after post)

~LazyDaze~ wrote:
Breathless love?

That’s brilliant! You’re amazing!

I’m hoping there would be more suggestions so I’ll have more options. It’s been so long since I wrote my last poem.

X*SuKi_SaKuRa_jUne*X 7 #
An Unknown Location | 3 months ago (10 minutes after post)

it’s really lovely!

how bout Nature Feelings?
cuz u’ve mixed ur feelings with nature! ^_^

Or Sunny Love?
4 the summer day, sunshine and stuff!

Or Come bock home?
or I will be waiting for you

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pink sparkle 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (13 minutes after post)

SuKi_jUne wrote:
it’s really lovely!

how bout Nature Feelings?
cuz u’ve mixed ur feelings with nature! ^_^

Or Sunny Love?
4 the summer day, sunshine and stuff!

Or Come bock home?
or I will be waiting for you

Thanks! You’re right. In the poem, I related my feelings through nature. Thanks for taking the time to read and give suggestions.

~LazyDaze~ 447 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (14 minutes after post)

Love hibernation?

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pink sparkle 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (16 minutes after post)

~LazyDaze~ wrote:
Love hibernation?

Hmm.. That’s a unique title. Why hibernation?

~LazyDaze~ 447 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (17 minutes after post)

Well the way you were saying that everything is basically on hold untill he comes back to marry you, hibernating untill he can come back

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pink sparkle 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (21 minutes after post)

~LazyDaze~ wrote:
Well the way you were saying that everything is basically on hold untill he comes back to marry you, hibernating untill he can come back

Oh…Now I get it. It’s like “I’d rather sleep to numb the pain until you come to wake me up.”

~LazyDaze~ 447 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (21 minutes after post)

Yes! :D

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X*SuKi_SaKuRa_jUne*X 7 #
An Unknown Location | 3 months ago (21 minutes after post)

Ur welcome!
A love that would never fade?
cuz u wrote in ur poem that u wud wait ryt?
or season’s love?

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pink sparkle 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (29 minutes after post)

SuKi_jUne wrote:
Ur welcome!
A love that would never fade?
cuz u wrote in ur poem that u wud wait ryt?
or season’s love?

Yes. I would wait even if I have to wait forever. I got really love struck I guess.

Season’s love is nice too…

X*SuKi_SaKuRa_jUne*X 7 #
An Unknown Location | 3 months ago (33 minutes after post)

pink sparkle wrote:

SuKi_jUne wrote:
Ur welcome!
A love that would never fade?
cuz u wrote in ur poem that u wud wait ryt?
or season’s love?

Yes. I would wait even if I have to wait forever. I got really love struck I guess.

Season’s love is nice too…

ur poem is rlly sweet!
the guy u wrote this for is very lucky!
3

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pink sparkle 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (42 minutes after post)

SuKi_jUne wrote:

pink sparkle wrote:

SuKi_jUne wrote:
Ur welcome!
A love that would never fade?
cuz u wrote in ur poem that u wud wait ryt?
or season’s love?

Yes. I would wait even if I have to wait forever. I got really love struck I guess.

Season’s love is nice too…

ur poem is rlly sweet!
the guy u wrote this for is very lucky!
3

Thanks. :) I hope he realizes that too.

limp/peonies #
An Unknown Location | 3 months ago (49 minutes after post)

It’s quite lovely, not as bad as I thought maybe- this is a good thing

Season’s Love, I think

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Phantom gentleman 1 #
An Unknown Location | 3 months ago (1 hour, 21 minutes after post)

The imagery was great. good poem just throwing these out there.

my springtime waits for you,

winter till you ask,

love weathers the storm

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pink sparkle 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (1 hour, 32 minutes after post)

Phantom gentleman wrote:
The imagery was great. good poem just throwing these out there.

my springtime waits for you,

winter till you ask,

love weathers the storm

I like “Winter till you ask.”

Thanks for the ideas everyone.

littlenick 152 #
An Undisclosed Location | 3 months ago (10 hours, 57 minutes after post)

Love In The Dark

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Michael Leibman 4 #
Littleton, CO, US | 3 months ago (18 hours, 29 minutes after post)

“Dear (name-of-person),”

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❤Natashka❤ 40 #
An Unknown Location | 3 months ago (1 day, 8 hours after post)

nice sonnet :) good rhythm too :) and I dont know if u meant to but good allusion to the garden of Eden it actually relates well to the meaning of the poem :)
hmmm.. how about “Waiting for u” or something like tht
or
“Waiting for happiness”
or u could even call it “Bring back the summer day”
to be honest I’m awful at titles ^^’ but its ur title and u could always bring a different idea, a slightly different meaning to the poem by what title u choose….

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An Unknown Location | 2 months, 3 weeks ago (1 week, 3 days after post)

missing you

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heifer_ca #
An Unknown Location | 2 months, 1 week ago (3 weeks, 2 days after post)

You should name it “I Left When You Did”

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ray48teres 4 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 1 week ago (1 month, 3 weeks after post)

all my heart and soul

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ray48teres 4 #
An Unknown Location | 1 month, 1 week ago (1 month, 3 weeks after post)

i think your poem explain how much you are in love and what you want back. never know maybe.but all my heart and soul is where the words come from

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