I appologize to all those I invited to this post.
I acctually took the time to read the terms of service of this site, and I refuse to give CBS the right to republish my work… I will post links to my work from here on out.
That is it so far… It is just some story telling etc… there is more to come… I will continue updating it at http://unsoshabl.com/she-came-for-me-...
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the sroty started off very good. Something that people on this site could relate to. Self harm suicide… But then your story became midway wth!?!
Shame really as, it started good.
zilverknight wrote:
the sroty started off very good. Something that people on this site could relate to. Self harm suicide… But then your story became midway wth!?!Shame really as, it started good.
indeed… this is only first draft… Thanks for the feedback
Don’t do it. Are you planning to commit suicide tonight? She’ll be back, you know.
First thing I read in a long time that captured and sparked my interest. Very good unsoshable, very good. There is a talent here that mustn’t go to waste.
Incredibly good.I really enjoyed that.
very well written and interesting. keep up the good work unsoshable :)
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She came for me today….
Death herself came to me this day
Sweetness on her breath as the words poured,
“with sadness I inform you that it is time to pay
A good life you made worthless… you must defend it.. in the highest of courts,
And this court will decide fire or bliss behind pearly gates”
In return I scream “whos choice to decide its my time
I dont agree with others deciding my fate
Even if the hell Icreated is in my head… This is no crime
Not for you them or anyone but me to choose”
Her stunning green and red eyes peircing me from behind her black vail
“my son this if this is a fight… You lose
Clenching that knife to your wrist… You already fail”
“what knife” I exclaim
Looking down and realizing my choice
Realizing my life is so very lame
Pain and Fear shaking in my voice
Blood rolling down my wrist to elbow
weaving in and out of the hair
Realizing I have hit a new low
I really do care,
Why, who, what, how
The questions keep coming
As I hear voices of friends family and foe
So fast and constant like a hum,
“come my dear lets get this over with”
She reaches for my blood drenched hand
My eyes fixed pupils large and set
Staring at her beautiful body through a tight translucent black mesh garment wrapping her body
with a long dark cloak draped around her neck and down her back to the ground
Her bitter cold gripped my fingers and palm
Ice growing through my now empty veins
As the crystaling reached my shoulder I jerked away
Reclaiming the hold on my life and ripping it from her cold death grip
I scream out in pain as the throbbing of nerves now being rewarmed from freshly pumped blood
Should I could I would I
Take the chance to seduce this gorgeous being of death
Run seduce kill torment
What choice do I make to escape this curse
In a fast and smooth swoop this gorgeous creature was wrapped under my uninjured arm
Her supple firm breast and tough tender thighs pressed hard against me
the cold sending a tremble through me from through the thin mesh she wore
She gasped when as it occurred that turned in to a long moan
knowing full well if I gave in to my weakness of pleasure
I would never keep my life
a life I now crave, respect, and admire
I slowly kiss her cheek, jaw line, neck
all the while this creature of beauty and darkness moaning
kissing up her neck to the bottom of her ear lobe
I whisper ever so softly, come back tonight
I will go with you after taking you…
To my astonishment she agreed
“with one term” she said
“I must take something now so I know your truthful”
her icey hand grabbed mine and she brought it her mouth
suddenly my right index finger was soaked in bitter cold
as it was now in her mouth
a torrent of pain ripped through me as she bit down
my hand now free, minus a finger
a small chuckle came from this beast
“I have your finger which holds what little confidence you once had”
That is it so far… It is just some story telling etc… there is more to come… I will continue updating it at http://unsoshabl.com/she-came-for-me-...
unsoshable edited this post 2 months ago. Read the previous text »
I appologize to all those I invited to this post. I acctually took the time to read the terms of service of this site, and I refuse to give CBS the right to republish my work… I will post links to my work from here on out.
That is it so far… It is just some story telling etc… there is more to come… I will continue updating it at http://unsoshabl.com/she-came-for-me-...
what do u mean they republish ur work
they can republish anything you post on here…
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the part that gets me is:
“You hereby grant us, our affiliates, and our partners a worldwide, irrevocable, royalty-free, nonexclusive, sublicensable license to use, reproduce, create derivative works of, distribute, publicly perform, publicly display, transfer, transmit, distribute, and publish Your Content and subsequent versions of Your Content for the purposes of” and it continues of to bug me more…..
I love the “about me” section
its so….. positive!
ĐaNi HaŦeS ŸoŪ wrote:
I love the “about me” section
its so….. positive!
Thanks dani! LOL. I will have to go back and re read it. I’m pretty sure that was back in late 2004 when I was in Iraq.
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