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I know about when it’s cloudy lol I probably should’ve said… It’s sorta based on religion in a way I was thinking that it’d be cool if it was a bit different so that the people think their God destryed the stars etc. :L Was there ever a long time when it was cloudy in specific religious books or summat? Probs not I guess…

I know… but it’s a book…it’s not going to be realistic, okay? :P

ehh - kinda. lol I know i don’t sound like a write atm but i cba to type tbh xD one of the protagonists(from the blurb>>”Soon after joining the Brotherhood, Nathaniel becomes injured and is delivered to the infirmary by the friars. His condition worsens and one morning his bed is found empty.”)has retrograde amnesia and lots of other “problems” cba to explain soz :P

Another extract: “…barbarians – but I was no better. What I had done in a previous lifetime was inexcusable by the merciful Lord Himself.
I was no savage. Yes, that much is true but after the sinful crimes I had committed, I deserved no forgiveness.
I lay there a while, thinking. It was unaware to me how long I’d stayed here. Nor was I aware how long ago I’d left my apprenticeship with the Brotherhood of Jah. There were so many things left to do for which I needed their blessing- although it would’ve done no good despite their noblest of efforts.
I mean - at the time, it never occurred to me. At the time, I thought that I’d done no wrong. However, my naiveté was soon corrected because it was already too late. I’d missed my opportunity to make things right and to make things better; To ensure that my feeble soul was away from Satan’s reach; To plead for Yahweh’s forgiveness of my mighty sins.”
^ but he hasn’t done a thing.

Then later, “I stared up at the empty sky. I was wishing and pleading for a sign from Yahweh.
Just a star. Just one star. Please. That’s all I want. Where’ve all the stars gone? What’ve you done?
There was no star and there was no sign.”

etc. soz for slow reply btw - I was pre-occupied :)

^ soz for messiness also btw cause I only have my draft on this comp :S