american help: i just wrote an article for the school newspaper about the death of bin laden, what do you guys think? - Help.com

So now that he has eliminated the head guys of Afganistan and Iraq
is he going to leave now.

I like it, but it glorifies Obama too much. But I guess thats what you are looking for, with it titled “The Political Courage of Barack Obama”.
There are thousands of other people, and presidents, and factors that played a role too. I know that kindof destroys your whole article, but its just my opinion.

Ok, thats cool. I understand. I just wanted to give a response.

it seems to much like your calling obama a hero

I dont know if there are multiple spellings, but is “sovereignty” spelled wrong?

writing=life mostly wrote:
it seems to much like your calling obama a hero

:)

It has been historical for leaders not to send in covert hit men
to pick on each other.Sort of an unwritten rule.
Killing a person like Bin Laden seems like a good idea on the surface
or is it a dangerous game.Don’t you think its about time to stop
the cat and mouse game all together.War should be obsolete by now.

It’s very good. I like it (: I agree with spirtaec9 when he says that there were lots of other people involved who could have been praised too, but if it’s an opinion piece like you said, then fair enough. Well done, it’s very good.

As an opinion piece, it’s good. It definitely gives your opinion.

I don’t agree with it but it isn’t a debate. :)

Well done. :)

Only someone in California thinks Obama has the 2012 election wrapped up. I know the East and West coasts will fall in line to kiss his a$$ but in fly over country he is not considered such a hero… How about a nod to the men in uniform who actually did the work and dodged the bullets?

The way you write and communicate with the reader is very good. But but the artical didn’t adds new idea or information for the readers. Note ( did you know that the U.S, established, and supported “al-Qaida army” in the 80s to fight and weaken the soviet union).

Dr. Ralph wrote:
Only someone in California thinks Obama has the 2012 election wrapped up. I know the East and West coasts will fall in line to kiss his a$$ but in fly over country he is not considered such a hero… How about a nod to the men in uniform who actually did the work and dodged the bullets?

agreed

To much of being biased.As a Writer or Reporter write only about what and how .Don’t ever glorify a President,regardless of who he made be.The Event, or just Politics.. They are ” Two ” different Subjects.Otherwise OK.

You didnt write an article, you wrote an essay, an opinion piece. Journalism is about presenting the facts in an unbiased and objective way so the reader can make up their own mind. What you have done here, is tell your readers what to think by way of your opinion.
So how do you back that up? what are your credentials that can lend weight to why anyone should listen to you?

Propagandist… ;) Same as all the news any more. Except FOX of course, which is fair and balanced.

HA HA HA HA HA!!! I am glad you still have a sense of humor classicrock! They all have their own agenda. Trust no one.

The opinion piece is not bad, but could have been much better. Anyway keep writing and improving, and keep inviting me :)

Saying its an opinion piece doesn’t give your opinion any weight.
You haven’t cited any sources for your facts, nor quoted any scholarly opinion to give your own credence.
Your writing lends emotional drama for weight, but not much else. Make sure your readers know how you know your stuff, or most wont read it.

They’ll eat it up, he is preaching to the choir in Southern California. Oh and I hate to tell you this, but Obama’s approval rating is only 49%… at exactly this time in W’s term in office his was 89%. Clinton still beat him because of the sorry state of the economy. I’m sure our stellar economy will carry Obabma, though. NOT.

Nobody had ever even heard of Barack Obama two years before the election. It was all about Hillary… really it is anyone’s game. I may even throw my hat in the ring.

He also has bad hair. very very bad hair

Vote Ralph…

People 45 and older now make up 51% of the voting age population. Obama isn’t a ’shoo-in’ by any means. :)

bobosnickums wrote:
He also has bad hair. very very bad hair

Now THAT’S the truth!

If I could vote in the States, Ralph, you’d have my vote.

As an opinion piece, it does its job.

US politics are so twisted and, occasionally, evil. I’ve got a good idea, let’s create and finance a terrorist organization. No! Wait! Even better, let’s put a dictator into power in a foreign country to ensure our interests are protected, to heck with the people and democracy!

Canada, on the other hand, is pretty fantastic. Comparably.

Man you know that’s right all that you said was nothing but the truth and i don’t think he would have taken that risk if he didn’t have too but all in all that was a good report.