I’m writing a novel and I just finished the Prologue.
I would love some friendly criticism!
As i proceeded down the hallway, I felt a strange sensation.
Imagine a character in the midst of a scene taken from a movie. Time freezes just long enough to inspire an
out of body experience to captivate the viewers interest. They watch themselves from a higher angle of life and lose
control of thier soulless embodiment, surrendering it to the unavoidable actions being played out on the screen.
Lips of bystanders continue to manouver without an escaping sound and every angelic move is displayed by perfection.
March, 15 2012 was nothing like that.
As I proceeded down the hallway I felt a starnge sensation of familiarity. Chatter fluttered endlessly
through the air as moving bodies tore past eachother in a jumbled motion. Gossip slid from lips as metal locker
doors slammed at normal speed. The morning carried its routine structure as if nothing deviant would overthrow
a typical Thursday in a small town high school.
I turned to face the words that were thrown against my back, and right on cue my feet began to hit the floor,
one after the other accelorating into a sprint. Our bodies collided with a force great enough to launch the air from
my lungs and send us both crashing to the cold tile floor.
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