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tomboi2007

please tell me wether you like this or not.

No One In This World
no one in this world could make me feel the way you do
i can’t believe we’re together no more hiding you
i love you so much more than any word could ever say
and yet you and i wait for a child to come along one day
and make our lives so much greater
but death is to come much much later
i’m sorry if i say things or do things you don’t like
but still we have one of the best relationships without any fights
the most we’ve had is an arugment and that was only minor
boys aren’t interesting cause you’re so much finer
i envy your body yet it suits you just right
and i love waking up next to you in the middle of the night
because i feel safe when you’re around
and sometimes when i’m down you act like a clown
just so you can see me smile and that makes you feel better
to know that i’m happy and i’ll love you till forever
you make me feel beautiful yet i’m still insecure
the hateful thoughts about my body used to run me but now they’re fewer
i hope i do the same for you, make you smile and happy
because you mean the world to me you classy happy chappy
lol that last line was a little weird
but you know me i’m never sane it’s what you’ve always feared

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adrianna 1 #
Atlanta, GA, US | 2 years, 6 months ago (2 hours, 29 minutes after post)

Very nice sparkles…I will have to take a minute to get maternal and get worried that you don’t fight. Probably you should throw a huge fit just so he can see if he can handle it :)
Beatifully written, did you write more?

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adrianna 1 #
Atlanta, GA, US | 2 years, 6 months ago (2 hours, 29 minutes after post)

Beautifully*

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☆miss lilies☆ 271 #
An Undisclosed Location | 2 years, 6 months ago (3 hours, 18 minutes after post)

*wink very nice!

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Ditzy 44 #
Ventura, CA, US | 2 years, 6 months ago (4 hours, 49 minutes after post)

Is cool … nice that you managed to get some humor in there but also kept it very love-y dove-y … :oD

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eDy 1 #
Kuala Lumpur, 14, MY | 2 years, 6 months ago (13 hours, 24 minutes after post)

congrats for your engagement,i do love the stuff you wrote and just wanna wish a long last happinest to both of you.

p/s:i’m a malaysian so my english is pretty bad huh? ;p

tomboi2007 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 2 years, 6 months ago (2 days, 21 hours after post)

thanks everyone, i like to hear feedback on my poems just incase they’re really crap.
yea that humor bit, i didn’t mean to add that i just couldn’t think of anything else that rhymes with happy lol oh well.
my fiance and i don’t fight we argue and sometimes we argue but laugh about it at the same time and my mother-in-law is always saying you’re not supose to laugh while you two are fighting, but yea it’s better then throwign things at each other.

but thanks for all the relpys that means alot. see yas.

penguinlove4eve 1 #
Santa Barbara, CA, US | 2 years, 6 months ago (2 days, 23 hours after post)

thats really cute=)
i really really like it*

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lovelylaura 1 #
Salt Lake City, UT, US | 2 years, 6 months ago (4 days, 20 hours after post)

So cute… I wish I wrote that!

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apache tear 2 #
Milverton, ON, CA | 2 years, 6 months ago (5 days, 11 hours after post)

It’s really beautiful. The ryming is wonderful and it gave me shivers as i read. good job! ^_^

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angel_msT 1 #
Quezon, 47, PH | 2 years, 6 months ago (1 week, 1 day after post)

I like it…sweet with a spice…makes me feel those butterflies in my stomach…

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spiritedsoul 4 #
Sandgate, G5, GB | 2 years, 5 months ago (1 month, 1 week after post)

romantic. u wrote it? if u have, seems like put a lo of thought into it :)

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tomboi2007 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 2 years, 5 months ago (1 month, 1 week after post)

yea i wrote it along with a few other poems. but alot of them can be really crap.

BKH199 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 2 years, 4 months ago (1 month, 3 weeks after post)

Thats sounds really cool to me!!

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lena g 1 #
North Jackson, OH, US | 2 years, 3 months ago (2 months, 2 weeks after post)

beatifully written

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yypezn 2 #
US | 2 years, 3 months ago (2 months, 4 weeks after post)

very romantic. you must be talented in song writing.

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tomboi2007 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 2 years, 3 months ago (3 months after post)

no i can only write a little poem when it comes to songs i need help lol.

yypezn 2 #
US | 2 years, 3 months ago (3 months after post)

I though they all close enough. Hum I see

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saettle2 #
Austin, TX, US | 2 years, 1 month ago (4 months, 2 weeks after post)

Really good, I would be impressed if a boy gave me that, you should really give it to your girl. She’s so lucky…. GOOD LUCK!

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sunshinealik 2 #
Denver, NC, US | 2 years, 1 month ago (4 months, 2 weeks after post)

loves it.

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bigsisreztle #
Norton, VA, US | 2 years, 1 month ago (4 months, 3 weeks after post)

“tell me if you like this or not” No question here!!!! I love homemade sons more thean real songs!!!! They are SOOOOO kewlio– expeicaly yours!!!

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tomboi2007 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 2 years, 1 month ago (4 months, 3 weeks after post)

thnks heaps guys

MARCUS 1 #
Dayton, OH, US | 2 years, 1 month ago (4 months, 3 weeks after post)

AWSOME”"” i like it.

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Perth, 08, AU | 2 years, 1 month ago (5 months, 2 weeks after post)

I’m sorry to say but it’s really bad. no talent whatsoever. please dont waste your time writing anymore! u shuldnt even be having a baby at ur age. u make it all sound like fun and games. ur just a child lol. just a stupid little girl. and ur baby is not going to have a good life. :)

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tomboi2007 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 2 years ago (5 months, 2 weeks after post)

well that’s your opinion and you’re entitled to it, but honestly i just put my poem on here to ask people whether they liked it or not and the majority of the people do so ahh well,
a big THANKS to all those who do like it.
and my baby is none of your business and you have no idea what sort of life he’s going to have so if you’ve got to say something like that about my child again think before you do because i love my child and my fiance and your words aren’t going to change that!

☆miss lilies☆ 271 #
An Undisclosed Location | 2 years ago (5 months, 2 weeks after post)

don’t worry hun, i’m sure that user has been reported. hugs.

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tomboi2007 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 2 years ago (5 months, 2 weeks after post)

thanks, lilies

☆miss lilies☆ 271 #
An Undisclosed Location | 2 years ago (5 months, 3 weeks after post)

you are always welcome. :)

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kerreb 1 #
Whitehouse Lower, T1, GB | 2 years ago (6 months after post)

i liked it
it made me feel all mushy =]

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Skyler11. 0 #
Ft Mitchell, KY, US | 2 years ago (6 months, 2 weeks after post)

it’s hard to determine whether i’m scared of you or love the poem. it’s good though.

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lucindarox 0 #
US | 2 years ago (6 months, 2 weeks after post)

I like it.
You could really make it into a song.

tomboi2007 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 12 months ago (6 months, 2 weeks after post)

i can’t really write songs without help from someone else.

skyler11 what do you mean scared of me? what could possibly be scary? lol.

IngeniousNotCrazy 1 #
Scottsville, VA, US | 1 year, 11 months ago (7 months, 1 week after post)

That was beautiful, and quite “limericky”. (I love making up words). I also love your avatar… it’s so cute!

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tomboi2007 1 #
An Undisclosed Location | 1 year, 11 months ago (7 months, 2 weeks after post)

thanks, i think i found this avatar on help.com lol oops.

jac99 0 #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 8 months ago (10 months, 3 weeks after post)

At the risk of sounding unpopular, your meter is all over the place and I don’t like the rhyme scheme (it’s a bit too Spike Milligan). Sorry. Some of the phrasing has potential but needs heaps of work.

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eresende #
An Unknown Location | 1 year, 6 months ago (11 months, 3 weeks after post)

To be honest I’m a poet and your poems is really getting there i like the way you make sense and the way you express your self to it, you are a great thinker and going in a great direction :) and in my point of view your poem is great hope to stay in toch and dont dought in asking for any questions if needed.

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