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pitseleh
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i like discriptions…

it gives me a chance to use my vocabulary :)
this is one of my favorites

There was an air about her. When she walked in the room you knew it, you felt it. Chills ran up your spine and raised the hairs on your legs. She didn’t talk, and didn’t need to. All you wanted to know about her you could see in her eyes. They were dark, soulful, and unlike the rest of her they had vulnerability about them. She was tall and graceful; her heartbeat matched the rhythm of her feet as she crossed the room, slowly growing closer to you. Her face and skin was so pale and fragile one might almost fear it would melt away with the snow. Long, black curls fell perfectly in place around her elegant face, and lips of blood red stood out among her pale lifeless skin. There is no blemish upon her, even her figure was envied by every woman in the room. She wears a black, lace, Sleeveless shirt that pulls down into a v that teases of what lays beneath the soft sheer fabric. Her skirt is the color of the night sky and meets only the middle of her thigh where not but three inches lower black leather boots finish the ensemble. Her legs are long, and, of what shows, the color of death. Around her neck is a black velvet ribbon, upon it a dead rose, encased in a small glass circle. She meets your eyes now, hers burning into your soul, reading it, judging it. Then without another glance, or even one word from her rose lips she leaves. From that moment you know, you will never forget her, and that some how in that instant you shared you fell in love with her. How, doesn’t matter. You will never see her again, but you spend the rest of you life looking for her.

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Nyxotic offline Verified User (2 years, 3 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
An Unknown Location | 2 years, 3 months ago (7 minutes after post)

This is a very good description. You could fine tune your grammatical skills to improve your writing.

Don’t ever stop writing.

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pitseleh offline Verified User (2 years, 3 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
Chicago, IL, US | 2 years, 3 months ago (9 minutes after post)

thanks.. i don’t have the best grammer iknow!

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Debrad1207 offline Verified User (2 years, 8 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
Tampa, FL, US | 2 years, 3 months ago (12 minutes after post)

Lol, your grammar is just fine. Vocabulary and writing skills are simply divine!! (Didn’t mean to make that rhyme.) Keep it up please!!! =)

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pitseleh offline Verified User (2 years, 3 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
Chicago, IL, US | 2 years, 3 months ago (13 minutes after post)

haha, a poet at heart i see! i will.

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Nyxotic offline Verified User (2 years, 3 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
An Unknown Location | 2 years, 3 months ago (17 minutes after post)

I don’t mean to sound critical but I spent a few years doing some minor editing. Therefore, whenever I read, little errors often just pop out at me. Most people would never notice them.

You really are very talented though. I could visualize everything that you described. I mean it when I say never stop writing. The day that you put down your pen you will lose a large part of yourself.

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Debrad1207 offline Verified User (2 years, 8 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
Tampa, FL, US | 2 years, 3 months ago (19 minutes after post)

Heh, I’m not a poet, nor a writer, at all. Just made a rhyme by accident. =) But you, on the other hand, have amazing skills… and I agree with oregon. Don’t ever stop writing!! =D

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pitseleh offline Verified User (2 years, 3 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
Chicago, IL, US | 2 years, 3 months ago (1 hour, 24 minutes after post)

i don’t ever plan on it! dont’ worry. i do have issues with grammer and i don’t mind. That’s what editors are for right? ;) my father just never saw fit to have me learn grammer. I appreciate all your kindly words!

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Barbyman offline Verified User (2 years, 5 months) Long Term User Shouts: 5 #
An Unknown Location | 2 years, 3 months ago (1 hour, 33 minutes after post)

what a talent when i was reading it my first impression was its like a song ,its like a poem ,no, but no its a start of a good writer, may i have youre autograph?
you are good ,may the great force guide you …..

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pitseleh offline Verified User (2 years, 3 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
Chicago, IL, US | 2 years, 3 months ago (1 hour, 35 minutes after post)

haha, thank you. the one thing you never want to hear is my songs. terrible, bach is turrning over in his grave at the the thought of them. of course you may have my autograph! i will have it send by carrier bird at once!

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Mï†z¥-superMODel offline Verified User (2 years, 9 months) Help.com Volunteer Moderator Long Term User Shouts: 3 #
Tullahoma, TN, US | 2 years, 3 months ago (11 hours, 50 minutes after post)

Great writing!

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powernutjr offline Verified User (2 years) Long Term User Shouts: 0 #
Newport News, VA, US | 2 years ago (3 months, 1 week after post)

^^ i wrote something, its about me. its got alot of what i actually see irl… i should share, its not as much detail, but its got alot of things in it..

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powernutjr offline Verified User (2 years) Long Term User Shouts: 0 #
Newport News, VA, US | 2 years ago (3 months, 1 week after post)

?… yea i really loved yours tho ^^! gj! keep it up

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Valkarma offline Verified User (1 year, 10 months) Long Term User Shouts: 1 #
GB | 1 year, 8 months ago (7 months, 1 week after post)

i lov descriptive writing and that was amazing. keep up such amazing work.

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