I like this line of thinking much better. A “career” really isn’t something one starts while they are still in grade school. Until you have gained formal education and earned a salary, it’s really more of a hobby or interest, which is still cool. I’d go with something like the example above because, aside from being more gramaticallly cound, it sounds like a more apt description.

well i like that but i think it sounds kinda bad calling it a hobby when im applying to be an editor for my school newspaper. Cause i state that its a passion of mine and I want to be the editor-in-chief of a major publication someday, and “hobby” sounds like just an interest rather than a passion.

[quote kemmy]I like the way you wrote it. It sounds the best that way, and is grammatically correct.[/quote]

Thanks, my parents are just making me worried my teacher wont get it right away. They dont think its right to use two different pronouns in that one sentence, but “its” refers to my “journalism career”, so i thnk it should be fine right?