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• Price for Wii With All Of This?
  

  As a bundle all that is worth… probably a couple thousand dollars. Not really sure, since I don’t have a Wii/buy Wii games, but I think you could get easily two thousand, probably more.
  
  The problem here is that you’re most likely going to have a lot of difficulty selling a bundle worth that much, because it’ll be hard to find someone willing to spend that much money at one time. No matter how much it’s worth, it’s hard for people to justify spending over a thousand dollars on video games all in one shot. (Note qwdfawdawdawdaw’s response.) Like Commander Ikari said, you should try to sell the games separately. Unless you want to sell them for much less than they’re worth?
  
  (Personally I would be willing to pay only about $1500 for the bundle, or to buy the console and a few games for about $500. I just don’t have the money that the whole list is worth.)
  - written 1 year, 3 months ago

• i am so confused.
  

  I can’t really help you with organization — any comments I make about that will probably just be repeats of whatever your teachers have told you, but the organization issue I had the most problems with when I was in high school was keeping examples separate (i.e., don’t talk about one, move onto another, and come back to the first before your conclusion).
  
  As for disproving the other side, if you have room for it in your essay, that shouldn’t be a problem, as long as it’s not the backbone of an example. The grader is right in this case — it’s not persuasive unless you contrast a “good” point of the side you’re defending with the “bad” point of the opposite side. It’s best to keep it relevant to a i>supporting /i> example of the main topic. (I’m not really sure what you’re writing about, so this might sound a little off, but I hope you get the gist.)
  
  It’s been a while since I took SATs, so any/all of this advice could be obsolete for today’s graders, but it still holds true as good advice for writing.
  - written 1 year, 3 months ago

• i am so confused.
  

  Not to be nosy, but how did you score on the essay overall? Was that the only negative comment? If you didn’t do well, it is likely that your introductory paragraph was not the only reason, and probably not even the main one. In that case, there are a lot of other parts of essay-writing that you should spend your time concentrating on, rather than worrying about something that sounds like it may be individual preference on the part of the graders.
  
  In case your intro paragraph was the only thing (or one of the only things) commented on, and your overall score was high, there really isn’t much specific advice I can give you. Again, unless more than one grader gave similar comments, this particular problem sounds like an issue with individual style preference, which you can’t really do much about. However, I recommend trying to introduce your examples using as few words as possible while still maintaining coherency. Also, try not to worry too much about proving your examples relevancy. If they are relevant it should be obvious without your explicitly saying so.
  - written 1 year, 3 months ago

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