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I’m happy to say that I’m doing allot better now, I owe it all to the people here on Help.com who helped me out last night.

yeah they were ok, i do not drink though so i spent the nights carting drunk girls home. talk about awkward conversations with some mad parents..

I just read it. I hate teasers! lol. I got a little confused as to who was talking but other than that it was cool. I wanna see what they do next, lol.

hey whats up, i just wanted to let you know that i posted a teaser for chapter 3 on my website, tell me what you think.

twenty! that seems popular now and days i just had a week full of my friends twenty year old parties.

i knew you would find that part funny, thanks for reading it. Just remember to logg on to my websie for now on to see whats going on in my story cause i will no longer post any more of it on here cause i debut the book sometime this year but i wont post the last 2 chapters on there cause your going to have to buy the book to see what else happens, but since your my very first reader, i’ll email you the last two chapters. I’ll add you as a friend in my website or you add me ok, just let me know if you have any questions over the first 2 chapters

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what did you think?

Here’s the website where i will be posting more stuff as i write them, and more of the story your reading. Their i will answer Any questions you have on the first 2 chapters but remember i wont and cant give anything away on whats to come.

did you finish reading chapter 2?

Theres the complete second chapter,i hope you like it, chapter 3 will be ready in a couple of days, Your lucky, your the first person to view my first two chapters of my book.

Chapter 2 ( The complete chapter) ENJOY

As we drove back home all I kept thinking about was the space ship that took over our bodies and how he froze them for a couple of seconds. I wonder if my dad saw what me and Alice saw, maybe he might know a little bit more than me and Alice but he sure won’t know how we felt when we were all frozen. I was exiting the freeway when all of a sudden I saw him, he looked so handsome sitting in his Ferrari. His blue eyes shinnying from the suns bright rays, his soft white pale skin and to top it all off he had a nice hard & firm chest. What am I saying here!, I need to get home before anything else happens but as always I spoke to soon. He saw me in my beat up car and said in his low sweet voice , ” Hello Jessica! I see your top is all wet ” I looked at my chest and saw that they were dry, ” No not that top, I’m talking about the cars top” I’m such an idiot why would a charming guy like Seth be looking at my breast but like always I spoke too soon . ” Those would look really nice if they were wet, Nah… I’m just kidding Jessica” Was he just kidding? or did he really want to see my Boobs all wet. What am I saying he’s perfect, but what if he’s not really joking? I’ll still let him see my Boobs all wet but only if he really asks me though. ” so I guess I’ll see you Friday night at Johns party ” Oh crap!, I had completely forgotten about Johns birthday. “Trust me your not the first one that has forgotten about his party” “HONK!” “HONK!” “HONK!”, “Hey stupid move out of the way!”…. ” Bye Jessica !” Just like that, the conversation I was dying to have was gone. ” so are you planning to move anytime soon, because those people behind us don’t seem pretty happy about us just sitting here like if we own the street or something. - Huh, Wha, What, Whats wrong , ” oh Shit!, were late for are appointment. I stepped on the gas pedal as fast as I could so I could drop these guys off at there house so we could go check out what’s been going on since we left the accident. As I pulled up to the driveway I saw him again, the same guy that was at the pollo loco was here at Paul’s house, but just like before he disappeared. ” We’ll see you guys later ok, tomorrow we could go hang out OR if you guys already have plans we can just hang out another day.” Lets get a move on Alice we’re already 2 hours late ” OK, OK ” hold your horses. ” So what do you think is going to happen, once we find out the world is coming to an end ?” Oh! just shut up Alice, your so stupid sometimes. As I pulled up to the driveway of my house, my dad was waiting for me at the doorstep more furious than he has ever been in his entire life. Alice, please don’t say a thing about us staying at San Pedroto get a bite to eat. ” why? “, Trust me!, if my dad finds out I Diss obeyed him he would kick me out of his house and take my car away faster than you can say ” Sweet pea apple pie”, “OK,”OK “I wont say a thing I promise”. ” First let me ask you a question tough, Why are you still living at your parents house when your already 21, and free to be where ever you want?” Well first of all I have everything here Duh! and second of all, I have nowhere else to go mainly because I have no money. After I lost my job at target it got allot harder to find another job with the same pay & my dad is giving me twice as much money but I have some rules to follow and a couple of chores to do during the week. ” I still think you should get your own place, but that’s just my opinion though.” Alright enough Chit chat!, my dad is getting more heated up by the minute. “WHERE HAVE YOU TWO BEEN, I’VE BEEN WAITING HERE ALL NIGHT FOR YOU?”, We were at Pual’s house eating chicken, Lisa & Stacy were there too. ” Is this true Alice?”, “Yes Sir!, We were all having some chicken Sir!” “Ok, I believe you for now!, but if I find out this is all a lie, you two will be over seas mopping floors for the rest of your lives, Agreed!.” Yes Sir!, “Yes Sir!”. ” Enough with the soldier talk, your starting to Piss me off when you should be trying to make me happy. Lets go inside & have some coffee, after we can see what else there is for us to do on this beautiful night.”
As soon as Alice shut the front door dad pushed a big blue button, walls came down from out of nowhere & locked the whole house so no one could get out or get in. ” So does this mean we can talk about our encounter with the aliens now?”, Yes Alice we can talk about our encounter with the aliens now!. ” Fehw, I thought I was going to crack at any time now, its hard to keep a secret from the world, especially a juicy one like this one.” “So tell me honey, What did you guys see over there?”, Well we pretty much saw everything that no one else saw. ” Did you guys see when the space ship lifted up and flew off into space?” ” Yeah!, We saw that and we also saw them starring right at us like if we had something they wanted really badly”. “What do you mean Alice?, they were starring at us , what else is there to say!”. Ok, Ok enough questions dad!, What did you see from your base camp?. “What I saw today is none of your business!, but if you really want to know I’ll tell you. At first I thought someone was playing a joke on us, because today is April fools day and we always play pranks on each other. Once we all saw that this wasn’t a joke we got right on it. We managed to see the space ship on the bridge but our system kept having several malfunctions, so I decided to send our Air Sckwad to check out the Unidentified aircraft. Then that’s when you called me twice to see if I knew anything but I knew the line wasn’t safe because the F.B.I was listening in on our conversation, so I told you to meet me here instead”. Dad, by any chance did you see when it flew up into the sky and left no sign of it ever being there? ” No, that’s why I asked you guys, by the time are Sckwad got there it was already too late, the only thing left was a gas tank truck and two trailer cars”. ” Tell him what they were trying to tell us Jessica”. No not yet Alice its too soon for that, ” To soon for what?” Didn’t I tell you to keep your mouth shut Alice!. “Tell me what’s going on or its off to the docks for you two “. Well…….. we kind of sort of felt them trying to speak to us, it kind of seemed like they needed our help with something and we were the only ones they needed help from. ” So when were you planning on telling me this Jessica?”, When the time was right dad, I know this isn’t good for your health so that’s why I kept it from you. ” Everything that I do isn’t good for my health honey, but I do it anyway because if I don’t we would lose all of this &we would be living out on the streets homeless and starving to death”. I know that dad but what if something bad happens to you, I really don’t know what I would do without you. ” Ohh honey…. Your over exaggerating you know that”, I know that dad but if I wasn’t so over protective you would be completely out of control by now. ” Honey, just stop and listen to your self. You sound worse than me right now” I don’t care how I sound dad!, All I care about is your safety and your health. ” Ok honey, I’ll try to take it easy for now on”. You promise!, ” Yes honey I promise”, ok. ” Lets move on then shall we guys, the longer we stay here discussing how we Feel about each other, the more closer the aliens will be to do what ever there planning to do with us”. “Your right Alice, lets check out the video to see if we can find some clues on what their next attempt will be, Honey are you coming? - (I cant believe I’m starting to sound like my dad, If this keeps happening I’m probably never going to move out on my own) . ” Jessica Are you coming or are you just going to stand there looking like a total idiot?” Yes I’m going I was just thinking about our encounter with that weird creature, ” Well lets start some research honey, We might not have much time for what’s to come”. Your right dad, lets get to work.

alright,i’ll have more for you to read tomorrow. ttyl then, bye

thank you, that means allot to me. Its that kind of response that keeps me writing more and more, thanks.

but i’m done for today, my eyes are killing me already, i’ll finish writing the rest of the chapter tmrw that way youll keep on guessing whats going to happen next.

i told you it was going to be a science fiction/mystery/comedy book, i love my stories, their so entertaining.

“I wont say a thing I promise”. ” First let me ask you a question tough, Why are you still living at your parents house when your already 21, and free to be where ever you want?” Well first of all I have everything here Duh! and second of all, I have nowhere else to go mainly because I have no money. After I lost my job at target it got allot harder to find another job with the same pay & my dad is giving me twice as much money but I have some rules to follow and a couple of chores to do during the week. ” I still think you should get your own place, but that’s just my opinion though.” Alright enough Chit chat!, my dad is getting more heated up by the minute.

heres more

no their just best friends

this is what i’ve typed up so far in my computer, i’ll write some more right now, dont worry i’m working on it, i’m already on chapter 3 but i havent finished typing chapter 2 yet on my computer.

Chapter 2

As we drove back home all I kept thinking about was the space ship that took over our bodies and how he froze them for a couple of seconds. I wonder if my dad saw what me and Alice saw, maybe he might know a little bit more than me and Alice but he sure won’t know how we felt when we were all frozen. I was exiting the freeway when all of a sudden I saw him, he looked so handsome sitting in his Ferrari. His blue eyes shinnying from the suns bright rays, his soft white pale skin and to top it all off he had a nice hard & firm chest. What am I saying here!, I need to get home before anything else happens but as always I spoke to soon. He saw me in my beat up car and said in his low sweet voice , ” Hello Jessica! I see your top is all wet ” I looked at my chest and saw that they were dry, ” No not that top, I’m talking about the cars top” I’m such an idiot why would a charming guy like Seth be looking at my breast but like always I spoke too soon . ” Those would look really nice if they were wet, Nah… I’m just kidding Jessica” Was he just kidding? or did he really want to see my Boobs all wet. What am I saying he’s perfect, but what if he’s not really joking? I’ll still let him see my Boobs all wet but only if he really asks me though. ” so I guess I’ll see you Friday night at Johns party ” Oh crap!, I had completely forgotten about Johns birthday. “Trust me your not the first one that has forgotten about his party” “HONK!” “HONK!” “HONK!”, “Hey stupid move out of the way!”…. ” Bye Jessica !” Just like that, the conversation I was dying to have was gone. ” so are you planning to move anytime soon, because those people behind us don’t seem pretty happy about us just sitting here like if we own the street or something. - Huh, Wha, What, Whats wrong , ” oh Shit!, were late for are appointment. I stepped on the gas pedal as fast as I could so I could drop these guys off at there house so we could go check out what’s been going on since we left the accident. As I pulled up to the driveway I saw him again, the same guy that was at the pollo loco was here at Paul’s house, but just like before he disappeared. ” We’ll see you guys later ok, tomorrow we could go hang out OR if you guys already have plans we can just hang out another day.” Lets get a move on Alice we’re already 2 hours late ” OK, OK ” hold your horses. ” So what do you think is going to happen, once we find out the world is coming to an end ?” Oh! just shut up Alice, your so stupid sometimes. As I pulled up to the driveway of my house, my dad was waiting for me at the doorstep more furious than he has ever been in his entire life. Alice, please don’t say a thing about us staying at San Pedroto get a bite to eat. ” why? “, Trust me!, if my dad finds out I Diss obeyed him he would kick me out of his house and take my car away faster than you can say ” Sweet pea apple pie”, “OK,”OK”

ok, here it goes.

i’m really glad you liked it, Are you ready for chapter 2……………..

i’m glad you really like it, i’m starting a new one right now, its called “Toxic donut”.

Alice to take a look the man was gone. Jessica you got to stop freaking out like this, its all in your head. So your saying the space ship we saw earlier was all just are imagination. I really don’t know, I actually don’t even care really. Well I know what I saw and if you don’t care than that’s fine! who cares what you say! because I’m hungry and I really don’t care about anything else other than stuffing my face with some chicken!. Alright Alice you go right ahead and just forget anything ever happened but if that day comes, promise me you’ll be at my side defending are planet or country or state or what ever we live in. Yes Jessica I promise I’ll be at your side when we die from Pauls annoying mouth, I’m serious Alice!. I want to know if you got what it takes to be a marine, I do got what it takes to be a marine, What did you say? I CANT HEAR YOU!!!, MY NAME IS ALICE SHEPPARD AND I AM A MARINE SIR!!. Thats more like it Alice, you got to want what you don’t have and grab a hold of it tight and never let it go. SIR Yes SIR, Ok Alice that’s enough for today ” Did I over do it again Jessica” yes but your improving, your almost as good as daddy once was and just about when I was 8 years old too. Lets not get side tracked hear, we have to reach Base camp 105 at exactly 14 hundred hours for we can find out more about this creature we saw today and also that weird sudden change in the accident . Can we first get some chicken? At least to go, Please…… Ok Ok. lets get some chicken and we can go. The only thing I want to do is get to my house and see my dad to find out what the heck is going on here, but I have to find out what to tell Paul, Lisa & Stacy first because they heard me and Alice argue and they heard about us going to base camp 105. ¿? What to do, What to do?¿, ” Oh I got it ” I’ll tell them we have to go to my dads camp because today we start are marine training, for we can be ready for when we leave to fight in Iraq or Baghdad or Russia , well whatever war were in right now. For all I know were probably fighting against are selves or we might not even be in a war right now for all I know. I wasn’t really that hungry but I ate a salad because Alice wouldn’t leave me alone, she kept insisting I ate something before we drove back home. Dont get me wrong I was kind of starving but if I ate I would be too stuffed to drive, I have a bladder problem sometimes when I eat out somewhere .”Alright guys lets get moving because traffics going to be such a nightmare on the way back home, especially after the accident that had just occurred.

this is the last page of chapter one

i’ll leave the last page of the chapter for last for it can be like a mystery to you

” what are you two waiting for lets get out of here” , as I got inside of the car the ground started to shake really fast, Alice yelled and so did the others, but I just froze where I was. What I saw at that very moment I will never forget for as long as I shall live I was out of this world . I saw a space ship fly right across me and inside of it was some kind of supernatural human being starring right at me and Alice. this thing could of stared at anyone here but it stared just at the two of us, it was scary but it was also amazing. As it flew higher up into the air we could somehow feel what they wanted, me and Alice could hear in are minds that they needed help and it had to be from us because we had something nobody else had. After a few seconds me and Alice just fell flat on the floor still wondering what we had that was special that nobody else had in this entire world. ” Alice are you Alright?. Yes Jessica, I’m just a little freaked out right now. yeah! tell me about it.” I wonder if Alice heard the same thing I heard, or maybe they told her something different then what they told me. Paul, Lisa & Stacy were still in the back seat of the car but they were sleeping!. Me and Alice just stared at everybody around us and it was as if they were all sound a sleep but also frozen and stuck in the spot they were when we froze as well. Just moments later everybody woke up and went on as if nothing ever happened here, where the space ship was at before now stood a tank truck of gas and two trailers. We asked Paul, Lisa & Stacy if they knew what happened but they couldn’t remember anything, It was amazing!, this unknown creature wiped out their memory completely of the space ship accident that never occurred. Now only me and Alice were the only ones who knew what really happened here today, ” Alice keep all of this to your self because if you tell somebody else they wont believe you, they’ll just laugh at you, OK! Jessica I promise I’ll keep my mouth shut. That crash was pretty cool Huh Alice!, yeah I guess it was pretty cool” ” My head is kind of blurry, Paul can you remind me again what happened here? Yeah OK, well we were riding at normal pace when we saw a bunch of cars piled up on the bridge and in the middle was a tank truck of gas and two trailer trucks, then you screamed LOOK OUT!!! and then we crashed and so here we are now, stuck in the same place since we crashed. Does that answer your question Alice? yeah kind of, thanks Paul. Any time weirdo. So what do you guys want to do now? (”I don’t know!”) Well can we please get out of here first and then figure something out, OK lets do that!. Hang on guys this is going to be a bumpy ride!. It really wasn’t that hard to squeeze threw these other cars but they sure were mad, mostly because we wouldn’t stop to let them know what was going on. C’mon Alice lets go make a phone call! to who ? My dad. oh! OK lets go, well be back guys. It was like dejavu all over again but this time we drove here instead of walking, Jessica wont your dad wonder why your calling him twice in one day? I’m not sure he’ll remember I called him cause everybody’s mind was swiped clean from the memory of the alien or what ever that thing was. Yeah your right!, ring ring ring Hello this is Srgt. Harris, Hi dad its me Jessica, oh hi honey, What’s wrong? Dad do you remember me calling you earlier, yes but shhhh…. This is not a secure line for that, meet me at base camp 105 at 14 hundred hours ASAP, ok dad see you there. What did he say Jessica? to meet him at home ASAP. “So does that mean were not the only ones that didn’t get are brains wiped out?” ” Well if my dad told me to shut up then I guess were not alone! This is what were going to do, were going to take Paul, Lisa & Stacy back home and tell them we have to go take care of some chores at my moms bakery. Do you honestly think they’ll buy it?, oh trust me honey, when it comes to my mom they know its serious. What happens if they want to help too? Dont you remember the last time they went to go help me and my mom out, they were so tired they couldn’t move for days. Lets go before they start making us feel guilty. Alice said with a big smile on her face ” I’ll race you?” Both of us ran as fast as we could to get inside the car but when we reached the car nobody was inside, Are friends had disappeared. Alice looked at Jessica with so much fear inside of her and said ” You don’t think the aliens took them do you?” Why would aliens want are friends for? Maybe to suck their brains and eat their bodies piece by piece. Dont be ridiculous Alice!, they’ll only do that to girls with blonde hair. “Yeah right”, Very funny Jessica. All of a sudden we heard someone yell ” Hey losers, over here!”. We looked around to see who was calling us losers and it turned out to be Paul, He was inside Pollo loco with Lisa & Stacy. We walked towards the door when all of a sudden I caught a glimpse of a man in a dark brown trench coat looking right at us, it was scary cause as soon as I told

its not the end of chapter 1 but its a start, read it and tell me if you like it and i’ll send you the rest.

OUT OF THIS WORLD
By:
Ezekiel.Herrera
Chapter ONE

It took almost two hours to get to long beach with this weather were having today. Yesterday me and Paul saw the forecast and they said that it was going to be hot & sunny but it was actually raining and really fogy. It makes it even harder for me to drive in a ford mustang convertible soft top, plus the sound of the rain hitting the top of the car was really noisy. Me and Alice were in the front , Paul, Lisa & Stacy were squeezing in the back seat. It was weird how me and all of the girls and Paul had planned to go eat sea food today. we saw this commercial on TV saying that if you eat lots of fish you wont get pimples ever again. yeah right, like if we were really going to believe that but we did get a strong craving for fish so we decided to come to long beach and get are grub on. Then all of a sudden Alice screamed ” Look out! ” so loud that my ears almost popped, I pressed the gas pedal so hard that I almost lost control of the car, we skid down a little further and hit the pile of cars pretty lightly, the other cars behind me were in control already because they had seen the huge accident from half a mile away. ” Are you guys Alright” Alice yelled out with so much fear in side of her. Paul said with a huge smile on his face, “Yeah, Were Alright Alice “. “Whats so funny Paul?” “Its just, you should of seen Lisas face she looked like she was going to Piss her pants.” Lisa slapped him so hard that his smile went away and got replaced with a frown. ” Jessica how about you, Are you okay?,” Yeah I’m just wondering what caused this accident.” I got out of the car to find out what had happened here and also to stretch a little cause I felt like if we were driving for days. Alice got out too and started walking towards me to check if I was really okay, it was amazing, the accident was more than half of the long beach bridge that connected with San Pedro. People yelled and screamed out for help but their was no way the fire department would get to those people in pain on time, I told Alice to stay with the car and the girls while I go see if can call my dad from a pay phone I saw 1/2 a mile back near a Pollo loco. She told me she wasn’t going to let me go alone and I know not to argue with Alice cause shes impossible, so I just said OK and told Paul, Lisa & Stacy we were going for help. We walked pretty fast towards the Pollo loco where the pay phone was, people asked us if we knew what had happened but knew nothing other than that it was a massive accident and that lots of people were hurt. Me and Alice finally reached the pay phone but neither one of us had change, so I told Alice I’ll go inside Pollo loco to make change. As I walked inside I saw everybody starring up at the TV with so much panic and fear, it was the accident that was on the bridge. I had no idea what that thing was, it looked like a giant space ship in the middle of the bridge. I went outside to call Alice for she can take a look at this, She ran inside to see what all the commotion was about. “Oh my goodness Jessica What is that?” she looked more scared than the people that were here, ” I thought you might know what it was, no! I don’t. lets go call your dad Jessica, OK!.” We rushed outside and called my dad, “ring” “ring” “ring”, “Hello” Dad its me Jessica, oh Hi Honey, Dad were in long beach right now and right next to the bridge, there was an accident here, well more like a destruction. Are you Ok honey, yes I’m fine, Dad do you know what that thing is? We don’t know yet! were sending troops right away, just stay away from there. who knows what that thing could be.” All I kept thinking was that Paul, Lisa, Stacy were back at the car in grave danger of something surreal. ” OK dad well stay away”. Alice looked at me like if I was crazy or something, are you nuts Jessica! we cant leave Paul, Lisa, Stacy behind, were not. were going back to get them.” I was afraid of what we were getting are selves into, but we cant just leave are friends behind to die and suffer. me and Alice ran as quick as we could to let them know we had to get out oh here before this turns into a war zone, Lisa! Paul Stacy, Alice yelled. We reached the car and there they were, confused as the other people that got stuck in this horrible accident. I told them everything we knew and all three of them panicked and got really scared.

i am seventeen years young. you?

oh im ok i guess. that is a very good step im happy for you :) co workers are fun to hang out with it may take some stress away from the work environment, i wrote a short post about myself in my profile if you want to know a little bit about me.

seems like we are wondering into the same help posts:P how are you doing today? taken any steps in creating relationships?